Joined: July 24, 2020
Joe Likes: 28 Songs
Joe Ryan gave feedback on Murder A Memory
Jonny, Love the demo and love the lyric. Its obvious you put in the time to fine tune the story so effectively. And it paid off. The flow of the lyric is silky smooth and every line flows effortlessly to the next. Nothing seems forced and that is one of... Read More
Joe Ryan gave feedback on Closer Than They Appear
Great demo Marvin. I was a little confused on the second line in V1. You mention hands at 10 and 2 and then you mention holdin an old friend. I get that you are remembering back but I wonder if that might stick with anyone else. Maybe its just me. I think... Read More
Joe Ryan gave feedback on Fifteen Minutes of Fame
Nice story Jessica. I think the demo fit well with the lyric. Only small crit…. I was looking for a payoff in the bridge. A twist or turn that took her somewhere. But overall a nice story. Cheers, Joe (I have not been around for a while. I will check... Read More
Joe Ryan gave feedback on In My Bones
Al, What a great and heartfelt write. Nice work Al. REALLY nice. Cheers, Joe
Joe Ryan gave feedback on Better Broke
Another Great song and Demo Jonny. You and Troy are a very talented pair. The musical style fits todays market while the lyrics can pull in older fans like me. Not easy to pull off. NICE !!! The Chorus Jumps off the page. But the line about the 4 legged clown had... Read More