This was a tricky one to write.. had to keep it away from the edge.. and be super clear in exactly what it was being murdered. 5 re-writes later.. and here's the demo.
Wondering.. what's your first experience of the TITLE.. and your feels on the first pass? Did I write the story clear enough? Do you know what it is that the singer is murdering here?? THANKS SO MUCH for taking a quick spin!!
Love it!! The chorus with so many “murder’ examples are perfect! Then with the past with family values is great!
Hope you get it cut!!!
BTW, is that you singing and where did you get the demo done?
March 09, 2022
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Jonny,
Love the demo and love the lyric.
Its obvious you put in the time to fine tune the story so effectively. And it paid off.
The flow of the lyric is silky smooth and every line flows effortlessly to the next. Nothing seems forced and that is one of the biggest challenges that wanna be songwriters (like me) don’t get.
My only question is have you pitched it to pros and how did they react to the use of the word murder? I used a line once “a life I regret” about being on the road away from my family and I had several professionals tell me to change it. Too negative.
Good luck with this one my friend !!!
Cheers,
Joe
May 01, 2022
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Murder A Memory
Writer: Jonny Born
You drew a heart with an arrow on my left hand
Then told me that you loved me more
And, for the first time ever, I went all-in
Loving you was something I'd give my life for
You left me no choice, when you left with no goodbye
If I’m gonna get past you, a part of me has to die
If I could murder a memory
I wouldn’t have to think twice
I’d kill the feelings that haunt me
And end this pain inside
I could drown it in whiskey
Cut what used to be
Burn everything you left me
Give it no more air to breathe
God knows I’d gladly do the time
If I could murder a memory
My daddy didn’t raise a violent son
Mamma said fighting was a sin
But the darkest things in life are often done
In desperate times. By desperate men
If I could murder a memory
I wouldn’t have to think twice
I’d kill the feelings that haunt me
And end this pain inside
I could drown it in whiskey
Cut what used to be
Burn everything you left me
Give it no more air to breathe
God knows I’d gladly do the time
If I could murder a memory
Supposedly time heals all wounds
But even if that’s true
I don’t think I can wait that long
To let go of you
If I could murder a memory
I wouldn’t have to think twice
I’d kill the feelings that haunt me
And end this pain inside
I could drown it in whiskey
Cut what used to be
Burn everything you left me
Give it no more air to breathe
God knows I’d gladly do the time
Would it even be a crime?
If I could murder a memory
If I could murder a memory
Copyright 2022 Gruviti Music Inc. BMI
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Love it!! The chorus with so many “murder’ examples are perfect! Then with the past with family values is great!
Hope you get it cut!!!
BTW, is that you singing and where did you get the demo done?
March 09, 2022
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Jonny,
Love the demo and love the lyric.
Its obvious you put in the time to fine tune the story so effectively. And it paid off.
The flow of the lyric is silky smooth and every line flows effortlessly to the next. Nothing seems forced and that is one of the biggest challenges that wanna be songwriters (like me) don’t get.
My only question is have you pitched it to pros and how did they react to the use of the word murder? I used a line once “a life I regret” about being on the road away from my family and I had several professionals tell me to change it. Too negative.
Good luck with this one my friend !!!
Cheers,
Joe
May 01, 2022
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Patrick Adams
Yes!!! I love this!
February 28, 2022
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