Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on Five-String

I hate to admit it, but I didn’t get what you were doing in the song until the 4th line of the chorus! Let me explain… I usually read the lyric sheet before listening to a song, just to see if anything jumps out to me.  Being in... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on Desert Highway

Steve, I really like the chorus, but the verses feel off to me.  The verses start off slow than really speed up.  Might just be me, but they don’t feel right. In the chorus, you need to drop the word “that”.  It’s a filler and... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on "WELCOME INTO MY WORLD"

All I I’ve got for you on this one is to possibly change the last line in the first verse to “These are the rules in my world”.  Your showing a “but” and “and” in the lyrics of V1, but you’re not singing them, which is a... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on I Can't Breathe (When You're Close to Me)

Guys, thank you for your input, suggestions, and support.  I’d like to think I’m getting better at writing,  but I’m still learning every day.  I’ve started comparing songwriting to playing golf - I know what I’m supposed to do… I’m just... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on "I LOOOVE THAT WOMAN"

It’s your song and you’re welcome to do with it as you please.  All I’m saying is I think the song could be better. I challenge you to scrap the current verses and rewrite them in a softer tone with a positive slant.  Instead of... Read More