Words and music, production and performance by me from a few years ago. A friend has a child that has autism and it made me wonder about the world of the autistic child. I did some research and it started to amaze me the more I got into the core of this problem. I wrote this song from the perspective of the child and he/she placing rules on how they will or will not interact with someone. It is their world and their rules.
I would like to know whatever anyone is thinking about when listening to this song, good, bad, or indifferent. Am I off base or did I hit the nail on the head? I liked the soundtrack I did for the song and does it envelope the listener?
Thanks Barry… it was fun doing this soundtrack and getting the eery (splg?) sound from my guitar and workstation effects. The fade out idea would have been a good one maybe stretching a bending chord to silence?
I believe this autism is out of control in our world and something is terribly wrong. if you look at our populations there is an array of debilitating afflictions that it seems we never experienced before. It gave me a reason to write and produce this song.
Thanks fro your feedback.
June 02, 2017
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All I I’ve got for you on this one is to possibly change the last line in the first verse to “These are the rules in my world”. Your showing a “but” and “and” in the lyrics of V1, but you’re not singing them, which is a good thing!
Keep writing,
Phillip
June 02, 2017
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I dig the chorus. Honestly, I would’ve been totally lost if you hadn’t added a note that it’s about autism. If you frame it in a usage or a context that is about autism, that shouldn’t be a problem. However, if it’s just heard on it’s own without that context, it’s a confusing lyric with a nice feel/groove. But I’m sure you know that already. Nice feel, though.
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June 02, 2017
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Brent: (and thanks for the feedback)
And probably I could not have put the word autism reasonably within the lyrics, of course. As it stands, it becomes (without the listener knowing it is about autism) an acting out story line of a child inviting another to come into his/her world but with conditions. Apparently an extreme world view or a “terms of endearment” played out in the autistic child’s mind (or any difficult child’s scenario.
Thanks again for the feedback.
June 03, 2017
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“Welcome Into My World”
(A song dedicated to finding a cure for autism)
(Verse #1)
Welcome into my world… quiet it may be
I won’t play in your games… but will you play with me?
I won’t look in your eyes… and don’t you look at me
It’s just these are rules in my world… the way it has to be
(Chorus)
Welcome into my world
Please won’t you play with me?
Yes welcome into my world
It’s my reality
(Verse #2)
Why am I alone… now that you’re with me?
There must be something wrong here… Mom and Daddy please
Don’t give up on me… I just lost my way
Don’t abandon my life… come and won’t you stay?
(Chorus)
Welcome into my world
Please won’t you play with me?
Yes welcome into my world
It’s my reality
Written by Robert Lloyd
(Copyright: 2008)
(239) 936-9555
E-mail: robertlloydmusic@cs.com
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HI Robert, a nice song here, lots of atmosphere and great feeling transmitted through your arrangement.
When I first heard the song (without looking at the vocals) It sounded like someone was singing from outer space so you achieved that `insular world `you were looking for.
One small thought, the ending where you fade out is good but could you compare this to maybe a fade out using the main theme with your `strange sound` you created.
David Bowie would approve either way!
June 01, 2017
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Thanks Barry… it was fun doing this soundtrack and getting the eery (splg?) sound from my guitar and workstation effects. The fade out idea would have been a good one maybe stretching a bending chord to silence?
I believe this autism is out of control in our world and something is terribly wrong. if you look at our populations there is an array of debilitating afflictions that it seems we never experienced before. It gave me a reason to write and produce this song.
Thanks fro your feedback.
June 02, 2017
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All I I’ve got for you on this one is to possibly change the last line in the first verse to “These are the rules in my world”. Your showing a “but” and “and” in the lyrics of V1, but you’re not singing them, which is a good thing!
Keep writing,
Phillip
June 02, 2017
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I dig the chorus. Honestly, I would’ve been totally lost if you hadn’t added a note that it’s about autism. If you frame it in a usage or a context that is about autism, that shouldn’t be a problem. However, if it’s just heard on it’s own without that context, it’s a confusing lyric with a nice feel/groove. But I’m sure you know that already. Nice feel, though.
Please pay it forward by leaving a comment or review on another writer’s song. Thanks!
June 02, 2017
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Brent: (and thanks for the feedback)
And probably I could not have put the word autism reasonably within the lyrics, of course. As it stands, it becomes (without the listener knowing it is about autism) an acting out story line of a child inviting another to come into his/her world but with conditions. Apparently an extreme world view or a “terms of endearment” played out in the autistic child’s mind (or any difficult child’s scenario.
Thanks again for the feedback.
June 03, 2017
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HI Robert, a nice song here, lots of atmosphere and great feeling transmitted through your arrangement.
When I first heard the song (without looking at the vocals) It sounded like someone was singing from outer space so you achieved that `insular world `you were looking for.
One small thought, the ending where you fade out is good but could you compare this to maybe a fade out using the main theme with your `strange sound` you created.
David Bowie would approve either way!
June 01, 2017
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