Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on "NOW I'M A MAN"

Hey Robert… not bad, fits your voice perfectly. I think V1L2 should be “I had”. Couldn’t tell from the recording, but the lyric sheet has “I have”. In the chorus, I’d drop the “But” in the first line and all of the “And’s” that start each... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on My Country Heart Lives in Tennessee (Work in Progress)

David, I wasn’t implying you copied anything… sometimes good ideas come to more than one person.  I thought the line sounded familiar, might have been from the old Salem TV commercial (You can take Salem out of the country but you can’t take the country out of... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on RISE

Not able to listen to the music right now, but a quick thought on the bridge.  The phrase “blood, sweat and tears” has been overused.  Being a Christian themed song, something like this may work better: He shed his blood and tears, shed for you and me The... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on My Country Heart Lives in Tennessee (Work in Progress)

Hi David!  Haven’t listened to the music yet, don’t want to disturb anybody around me, but reading through the lyrics, first thing I’d suggest is shorten the title to “My Country Heart”. It feels like there’s a couple of cliches in the lyrics.  Since... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on The Africaan Poet

So many things on this one… Should Africaan be spelled with a “k” instead of the “c”? Musically, the production is good, and feels easy going, which belies the ending to the song.  Since there is no chorus, the music feels a little monotonous.  You might consider taking... Read More