Fun loving song with a hint of Bluegrass mixed in. Written during one of my "what if" moods, as in what if this is really what happens. Not meant to be a Christian or religious song in any way.
It has been suggested the song needs the 3rd chorus, or at least a bridge between 2nd chorus and 3rd verse, but I was trying to end the song on the positive outcome. Any and all feedback appreciated.
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Hey Philip,
Thanks for checking out my song Grind. More than happy to return the favor…:-)
I grew up on the Bob and Donovan (Childs’ and Cecil Sharp’s ballads also a big influence through Fairport Convention and Steeleye Span) and your song sounds more folk than country to me: if I have to describe the difference, I’d say country is more commercial and folk is more fulfilling… also like the hints of Lou Reed in the vocals.
I also relate to writing with who you are in mind, not necessarily with what will sell in mind. That’s a double-edged sword these days, but where honesty and integrity matters, I think you have done a pretty good job. Keep writing!
May 02, 2017
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Phillip,
I really like the bluegrass, it really suits you and the song, made it more catchy. I think it would be fun to have the first verse tell how you got to heaven-It is great how is too. Could add a little more progression and more to the story. I really like the sound and vibe of this song, I like the bluegrass!
May 11, 2017
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Verse 1
Drinking wine with Jesus
On a cloudy day
The sky down below us
Is cold, dark and gray
Looking back at my life
He wasn't sure I could stay
Drinking wine with Jesus
On a cloudy day
Chorus
When you get to Heaven
You get a glass of wine
You sit and talk with Jesus
About your lifetime
If you lived a good life
You will get to stay
If you lived a bad one
You get sent away
Verse 2
Drinking wine with Jesus
On a rainy day
Though I made a few mistakes
I never went too astray
One big thing I didn't do
I was never one to pray
Drinking wine with Jesus
On a rainy day
Chorus
When you get to Heaven
You get a glass of wine
You sit and talk with Jesus
About your lifetime
If you lived a good life
You will get to stay
If you lived a bad one
You get sent away
Verse 3
Drinking wine with Jesus
On a sunny day
He thought I did more good
Than bad could take away
Passing bread between us
Looks like I can stay
Drinking wine with Jesus
On a sunny day
Drinking wine with Jesus
On a sunny day
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Phillip, your style of these last two song has a very unique sound to them (very familiar) I can’t pin point who it is that these have the essence of. Suppose I could check your influences 
. I like it though. Again, catchy melody. Not sure I agree with the need for the 2nd chorus and 3rd verse, to me this feels just right. I like how it sort of just ends like this. leaves a slight mystery. Any thoughts on making this averrable to sell. I’d be interested in purchasing this and listening to it fairly regularly. Sort of a nice little tune.
January 07, 2016
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Agree with Dennis here. I like your style; reminds me of John Prine.
January 26, 2016
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Hey Philip,
Thanks for checking out my song Grind. More than happy to return the favor…:-)
I grew up on the Bob and Donovan (Childs’ and Cecil Sharp’s ballads also a big influence through Fairport Convention and Steeleye Span) and your song sounds more folk than country to me: if I have to describe the difference, I’d say country is more commercial and folk is more fulfilling… also like the hints of Lou Reed in the vocals.
I also relate to writing with who you are in mind, not necessarily with what will sell in mind. That’s a double-edged sword these days, but where honesty and integrity matters, I think you have done a pretty good job. Keep writing!
May 02, 2017
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Phillip,
I really like the bluegrass, it really suits you and the song, made it more catchy. I think it would be fun to have the first verse tell how you got to heaven-It is great how is too. Could add a little more progression and more to the story. I really like the sound and vibe of this song, I like the bluegrass!
May 11, 2017
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Dennis Field
Phillip, your style of these last two song has a very unique sound to them (very familiar) I can’t pin point who it is that these have the essence of. Suppose I could check your influences
. I like it though. Again, catchy melody. Not sure I agree with the need for the 2nd chorus and 3rd verse, to me this feels just right. I like how it sort of just ends like this. leaves a slight mystery. Any thoughts on making this averrable to sell. I’d be interested in purchasing this and listening to it fairly regularly. Sort of a nice little tune.
January 07, 2016
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