Erotic Country... that's what I've been calling some of my cowriter's lyrics (Kim Ouellette). She has several sets of lyrics that are too hot and steamy for today's radio. Believe me, this is a toned down version from the original lyrics.
This is a work tape with full band production (it's not perfect). Check your device volume before playing as it comes in strong. Looking for feedback on the lyrics and music track. Please don't judge this song on my singing ability. Is there a place for Erotic Country in today's music scene?
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Amber, I am interested on your take for the “drag my tongue” line. Do you feel it’s too much, doesn’t fit the song, degrading in some manner? I’d bet we’ve all done it at some point. We were trying to write to push the limits of what can be in a country song. There was another line I totally had to replace, as it was going to far!
Your input is greatly appreciated,
Phillip
July 13, 2017
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I agree with Amber, and would suggest experimenting with R&B, hip-hop, or something along that line. I think the lyrics would fit right in to those other genres. You throw that in, but maybe the whole song should go in that direction.
July 13, 2017
Phillip,
The drag the tongue sounds a bit like a dog to me, but that is just an opinion.
July 13, 2017
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maybe use words more gentle, smooth, kiss on your lips. It gives a more gentlemen, romantic side.
July 13, 2017
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Amber, thank you so much for your thoughts. I have the line “Taste the sweetness of your lips” as a backup for that one.
Michael, I couldn’t tell you what current R&B or hip-hop sounds like… not in my wheelhouse.
Thanks for the input,
Phillip
July 14, 2017
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The Sweetest v4
Your body makes mine feel magic
More than I can imagine
Trail my fingers down your neck
Whisper softly out of breath
My gaze lingers longer than wise
Making it hard to disguise
How your curves make me feel
No more waiting to reveal
Chorus:
I know, I know where you're the sweetest
I know, I know how to love you the deepest
Your body pressed against mine
The highest high I can find
When I'm loving you it's the sweetest
When you close those beautiful eyes
What comes next is no surprise
Drag my tongue 'cross your lips
Move my hands around your hips
Chorus: Repeat
Bridge:
Skin on skin, blending as one
Tangled fury as we become
Shattered and undone
Chorus: Repeat
Tag: When I'm loving you it's the sweetest
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The live production was fantastic, I could really hear that there was a build in the song and the change in the bridge. the lyrics in the chorus are simple and catchy. I don’t know if I like the picture of “drag my tongue cross your lips,“but that is just my two cents. everything seems well written to me. I would love to hear this sung with a male vocal that can really show the change in scale on your chorus and go really- low and deep speaking on the bridge. If you had a country singer sing this I am sure they could add enough to make it more country, as for right now I could hear Ok Go.
July 10, 2017
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Amber, I am interested on your take for the “drag my tongue” line. Do you feel it’s too much, doesn’t fit the song, degrading in some manner? I’d bet we’ve all done it at some point. We were trying to write to push the limits of what can be in a country song. There was another line I totally had to replace, as it was going to far!
Your input is greatly appreciated,
Phillip
July 13, 2017
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I agree with Amber, and would suggest experimenting with R&B, hip-hop, or something along that line. I think the lyrics would fit right in to those other genres. You throw that in, but maybe the whole song should go in that direction.
July 13, 2017
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Phillip,
The drag the tongue sounds a bit like a dog to me, but that is just an opinion.
July 13, 2017
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maybe use words more gentle, smooth, kiss on your lips. It gives a more gentlemen, romantic side.
July 13, 2017
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Amber, thank you so much for your thoughts. I have the line “Taste the sweetness of your lips” as a backup for that one.
Michael, I couldn’t tell you what current R&B or hip-hop sounds like… not in my wheelhouse.
Thanks for the input,
Phillip
July 14, 2017
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Amber Lewis
The live production was fantastic, I could really hear that there was a build in the song and the change in the bridge. the lyrics in the chorus are simple and catchy. I don’t know if I like the picture of “drag my tongue cross your lips,“but that is just my two cents. everything seems well written to me. I would love to hear this sung with a male vocal that can really show the change in scale on your chorus and go really- low and deep speaking on the bridge. If you had a country singer sing this I am sure they could add enough to make it more country, as for right now I could hear Ok Go.
July 10, 2017
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