I wrote this song based within a day. I got the songtopic prompt Saturday and recorded it quickly Sunday night in my garage(not heated btw) because the babies were sleeping. It is rough, but I think there is some good stuff in it. Let me know what you think. I had fun throwing it together.
What seems to work and what doesn't? Let me know . . .and thank you so much for listening!
Thanks Lachelle for the feedback. I can see how it seems cheesy. When I write in a hurry it comes out like a chaotic random diary entry. I don’t always understand it myself.
I too think it would be cool with a full band and the tweeking you mentioned. I have played in full bands before, but it has always been short lived. I really appreciate the feedback.
Thanks!
February 07, 2014
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pressed to my ear, is the satellite that screams in my . . .,
head to the door, as it rotates out of time, and I rotate out of time(*tempo slow down)
(pick it back up)sssssssssSTOP, spilling out your guts, as if I need to hear this stuff that sticking to my shirt, I wish I had a different shirt, Cuz I'm sweating here, waiting for you to answer, expecting you to step up and give me your attention, at least for this one thing . . .
1)It's 2)not 3)roc(+)ket 4)sci(+)ence,
It's just non com pli ence,
Is it rain or is it shine, is it wrong or is it right,
Should I stay or should I go, All I need is you to Let me know.
Let Me Know (repeat)
Another day went by, silly how it works like that,
I can't sleep at night, the phone screams in my . . .,
head to the door, as it rotates out of time, and I rotate out of time(*tempo slow down)
(pick it back up)sssssssssSTOP, spilling out your guts, as if I need to hear this stuff that sticking to my shirt, I wish I had a different shirt, Cuz I'm sweating here, waiting for you to answer, expecting you to step up and give me your attention, at least for this one thing . . .
1)It's 2)not 3)roc(+)ket 4)sci(+)ence,
It's just non com pli ence,
Is it rain or is it shine, is it wrong or is it right,
Should I stay or should I go, All I need is you to Let me know.
from the moment I met you I knew that I'd let you, take advantage of something that something inside me,
don't really care, if it hurts Im aware, that in time I will fall away broken. . .
(softer and slower)
BUT all that will come is worth it, (pause)
the good or the bad, I'll work through it,
(build) you and or me, NO it won't really matter in the end . . . I guess{spoken}(hold)
All I need is you to let me know . . .
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I actually like the accompaniment to this song. I think the pre-chorus is a little cheesy. Maybe the bit about the shirt can be replaced by something else… I like the tempo changes and I think you have the ability to do more with your vocals throughout the song, changing up the melody a bit in the pre-chorus especially. And maybe shorten and simplify the end of the song as well. I’d love to hear this with a band!!
February 07, 2014
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Thanks Lachelle for the feedback. I can see how it seems cheesy. When I write in a hurry it comes out like a chaotic random diary entry. I don’t always understand it myself.
I too think it would be cool with a full band and the tweeking you mentioned. I have played in full bands before, but it has always been short lived. I really appreciate the feedback.
Thanks!
February 07, 2014
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Lachelle Chaney
I actually like the accompaniment to this song. I think the pre-chorus is a little cheesy. Maybe the bit about the shirt can be replaced by something else… I like the tempo changes and I think you have the ability to do more with your vocals throughout the song, changing up the melody a bit in the pre-chorus especially. And maybe shorten and simplify the end of the song as well. I’d love to hear this with a band!!
February 07, 2014
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