This is a little surreal pop song recorded under lockdown earlier this year in a single take. Of course, it's a demo and needs more instruments and voices so I have to polish it up, but the raw emotion and the power of the lyrics is there already and I decided to share it and get your feedback on how to make it better. It is the first song I am putting out where all the writing, singing and playing is mine, and for a lyricist I think I did about OK, though your opinions may vary. It is what it is.
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Sleep
Take a look at me now,
I am falling asleep;
With so much unsaid,
I go down in the deep.
My soldiers can’t wait,
They are stomping their feet.
I leave the here now,
This heart is discrete.
I hurry on forward,
And break in a run.
The spots on my shirt
Are burnt by the sun.
High light and low light,
It’s all light to me.
The fortunes of tellers
Are so hard to see.
Chorus
No way to find out what I have to lose.
It’s dream time now, I’m playing it loose.
My work is complete,
I won’t come back soon,
I am already down
With the old Cajun moon.
All treasures are stolen,
There is nothing to take.
You can have my Camino
Rusting down by the lake.
I’m tired of the noise,
And I gaze at the moon.
I give her my heart,
She dresses my wounds.
While up in the gully
Monks laugh at the loons.
Their lovely companions
Are taking off soon.
Chorus
No way to find out what I have to lose.
It’s dream time now, I’m playing it loose.
J Jackson Lucas ©2020
jjacksonlucas@yahoo.com
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