a bluegrass " Someone's leavin' Someone" Song
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elizabeth kurman / BMI songwriter
Thank you Thomas ! I got lucky on that one ... with all this “down time” the great pickers are available… 
June 29, 2020
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Great production on the demo.
Love the dobro and mando.
I like the overall story but for some reason the
“Love /Disease” line rubbed me a bit.
I understand the Disease - Cure relationship.
But for me having the word disease in there feels off.
Really like most of what you have done here.
Good luck.
August 07, 2020
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Love the demo production. The song is catchy, and I like the melody. In vs.2, second line “Diamond rings”, it seems that the singer had to really stretch out those two words to fit the line. “Not even diamond rings” would’ve fit well there, but that’s hindsight now.
Other thoughts were that the bridge is quite long and adds a ton of information that makes it feel almost like another verse instead of a bridge. Since the song doesn’t progress, but stays in the same place all the way through, it probably wouldn’t have needed a bridge. Again, all hindsight now.
Overall, it sounds nice and bluegrassy, and I enjoyed listening!! If that was you singing, you have a very pretty voice!
February 02, 2021
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VERSE 1:
I'm packin' up my bags to go
this love affair has hit the floor
you can't blame another thing on me
Baby won’t you set me free
Our love is history
and I won't be back no more!
CHORUS:
No, I won't be comin' back
of that you can be sure
you've seen the last of me.
If you treat Love like a disease
Then let my walkin' out the door be the cure.
VERSE 2:
Your love don’t mean a thing
Diamond rings
I’d rather have my sanity
Don’t know where that may be
Don't go and look for me.
I won't be back no more!
CHORUS:
No, I won't be comin' back
of that you can be sure
you've seen the last of me.
If you treat Love like a disease
Let my walkin' out the door be the cure.
BRIDGE:
You kept me in the dark, with this band o’ gold
they say a heart can heal alright, but I don't know
How can the warmth return ?
you keep thinkin' we can be good friends, but that's never gonna happen Baby !
CHORUS:
No, I won't be comin' back
of that you can be sure
you've seen the last of me.
If you treat Love like a disease
Then Let my walkin' out the door be the cure.
PRE CHORUS:
Hope for a better life, with times to come,
Hope I’ll be dancin' with somebody new....
CHORUS:
but I won't be comin' back
of that you can be sure
you've seen the last of me.
If you treat Love like a disease
Let my walkin' out the door be the cure.
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elizabeth kurman / BMI songwriter
Thank you Thomas ! I got lucky on that one ... with all this “down time” the great pickers are available…
June 29, 2020
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Great production on the demo.
Love the dobro and mando.
I like the overall story but for some reason the
“Love /Disease” line rubbed me a bit.
I understand the Disease - Cure relationship.
But for me having the word disease in there feels off.
Really like most of what you have done here.
Good luck.
August 07, 2020
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Love the demo production. The song is catchy, and I like the melody. In vs.2, second line “Diamond rings”, it seems that the singer had to really stretch out those two words to fit the line. “Not even diamond rings” would’ve fit well there, but that’s hindsight now.
Other thoughts were that the bridge is quite long and adds a ton of information that makes it feel almost like another verse instead of a bridge. Since the song doesn’t progress, but stays in the same place all the way through, it probably wouldn’t have needed a bridge. Again, all hindsight now.
Overall, it sounds nice and bluegrassy, and I enjoyed listening!! If that was you singing, you have a very pretty voice!
February 02, 2021
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Great bluegrass tune! Clever chorus, and I dig the dobro player. Nice!
June 29, 2020
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