As a songwriter, it doesn't get any better than this ... getting to pay homage to the great R&B Torch Songs I grew up with. Enjoy!
Any and All...
elizabeth kurman / BMI songwriter
thank you jack for your feed back you’re so kind .. I love it too…Ray nailed it and to his credit, I wrote it lower and this is not an easy song to sing the way I wrote it… I hear it in my head and it’s killing it… but apparently the singer in my head sings better than what comes outta my mouth.. 
So he did a fine job.. I just think now I want that R&B percy sledge, emoting kind of torch singer.. .. As a writer, I’m always open to the demo singer’s interpretation and Ray did a great job. I think it’s ok to have multiple facets to a diamond.. I love to see a song sparkle… 
April 24, 2020
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Love it! I’d love to hear Chris Stapleton sing this one. Right up his alley.
One line 3 I expected “You’re just too hard to figure out”
I like all the space in the song.
tracy
April 25, 2020
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elizabeth kurman / BMI songwriter
Tracy,
Wow, Chris Stapleton ... I just listened to his songs he is definitely the male artist for this one. I’ll let my publisher know to shop it to him. thanks
April 26, 2020
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FYI, “ancient tones” is a term that Bill Monroe uttered to his then-guitarist Peter Rowan while they were writing “Walls of Time.” Listen to that original version by Monroe and you will understand what sound they were trying to get across. This has a great R&B vibe, totally dance-able with the one that you love.
May 03, 2020
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elizabeth kurman / BMI songwriter
Mitch,
that is one of my all-time fav songs…i first heard it on Emmy Lou’s live at the ryman cd.. omg.. the high 4th chordal harmony always gets me.. love bluegrass….. yes the song is my homage to R&B Torch songs..i.e. Percy Sledge, etc.. .. Ray did a great job on this one !
May 03, 2020
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Track has a great feel, the organ adds so much, good luck with it. Bob
November 24, 2020
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THIS JUST AIN’T GONNA WORK OUT (male vocal) – lyric by elizabeth kurman c 2017 (male vocal)
THIS JUST AIN’T GONNA WORK OUT
I GOTTA GO, I’M SORRY GIRL
YOU’RE TOO HARD TO REACH
AND NO MATTER WHAT I SAY, IT ALWAYS TURNS OUT THIS WAY
SIT DOWN WHAT CAN I SAY TO YOU
G-D KNOWS I’VE TRIED TO LET YOU KNOW WHY I CAN’T STAY
IT’S NOT A SIMPLE THING WHEN THIS WORLD IS ALL YOU KNOW
BUT IF YOU’RE BOUND TO THIS PLACE
HEY I’M GONNA MISS YA’ GIRL
AH BUT I CAN’T STAY-
IT’S MY HEART AND SOUL THAT’S CRYIN’
AND THERE’S JUST NO WAY, HEAR ME WHEN I SAY
THIS JUST AIN’T GONNA WORK OUT!!
I GOTTA GO, I’M SORRY GIRL
YOU’RE TOO HARD TO REACH
AND NO MATTER WHAT I SAY, IT ALWAYS TURNS OUT THIS WAY
AND ALWAYS WILL….
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A lovely ballad with a timeless quality both in the music and the lyric so I think it can easily be done in a variety of styles.
Nice, restrained production with a classic feel and what a great vocal! The most amazing thing for me is the way Ray sang a lyric pretty much in blank verse to a tune that is structured to take a pair of rhymes in a verse.
Lovely tune.
April 23, 2020
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elizabeth kurman / BMI songwriter
thank you jack for your feed back you’re so kind .. I love it too…Ray nailed it and to his credit, I wrote it lower and this is not an easy song to sing the way I wrote it… I hear it in my head and it’s killing it… but apparently the singer in my head sings better than what comes outta my mouth.. So he did a fine job.. I just think now I want that R&B percy sledge, emoting kind of torch singer.. .. As a writer, I’m always open to the demo singer’s interpretation and Ray did a great job. I think it’s ok to have multiple facets to a diamond.. I love to see a song sparkle…
April 24, 2020
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Love it! I’d love to hear Chris Stapleton sing this one. Right up his alley.
One line 3 I expected “You’re just too hard to figure out”
I like all the space in the song.
tracy
April 25, 2020
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elizabeth kurman / BMI songwriter
Tracy,
Wow, Chris Stapleton ... I just listened to his songs he is definitely the male artist for this one. I’ll let my publisher know to shop it to him. thanks
April 26, 2020
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FYI, “ancient tones” is a term that Bill Monroe uttered to his then-guitarist Peter Rowan while they were writing “Walls of Time.” Listen to that original version by Monroe and you will understand what sound they were trying to get across. This has a great R&B vibe, totally dance-able with the one that you love.
May 03, 2020
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elizabeth kurman / BMI songwriter
Mitch,
that is one of my all-time fav songs…i first heard it on Emmy Lou’s live at the ryman cd.. omg.. the high 4th chordal harmony always gets me.. love bluegrass….. yes the song is my homage to R&B Torch songs..i.e. Percy Sledge, etc.. .. Ray did a great job on this one !
May 03, 2020
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Track has a great feel, the organ adds so much, good luck with it. Bob
November 24, 2020
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A lovely ballad with a timeless quality both in the music and the lyric so I think it can easily be done in a variety of styles.
Nice, restrained production with a classic feel and what a great vocal! The most amazing thing for me is the way Ray sang a lyric pretty much in blank verse to a tune that is structured to take a pair of rhymes in a verse.
Lovely tune.
April 23, 2020
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