I was imagining what it must have been like to have been a dirt farmer during the Great Depression and losing everything. How would you pray in that situation? Everything gone.
I'm not sure what genre this would sit in. To me it's Americana, but that isn't an option here.
Let me know what you think.
1) Interesting song. 2) Did NOT like piano part on bridge (amateurish). 3) Lyrics grab my attention, more so than the music. 4) You might want to think about having someone who’s really solid musically to work on this song with you—your gift seems to be on the lyric side of the house. 5)I will not forget your lyrics! —Best of luck!
July 31, 2018
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Hi Sam, your song has a nice flow, but each sections is well separated. I like the lyric idea. Think you are right, it’s a Country/Blues/Gospel mix = Americana. Good job.
August 02, 2018
I think this song is well written, however it’s a little too positive for someone who is losing everything. More to that point, in the bridge you wrote about squeezing the last few pennies in the tank, but back then a penny was worth a lot more than today, a LOT more.
Are you the vocalist as well? Either way, good work!
October 28, 2019
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There's a butcher in the wind,
That peels the skin right off the plain.
I'd been praying for the rain,
Just like Elijah,
But it never came.
Crops have failed a second year,
Now the mortgage is foreclosed.
And my kids are skin and bones,
Feel like Moses,
It's time to go.
CHORUS
Your hand is heavy upon me, O Lord,
Have mercy on me, Have mercy on me
I don't know why, so I'm searching Your Word,
Have mercy on me, Have mercy on me.
We'll breathe clean air in California,
If this jalopy makes it through.
Find work in a Pickin' Crew.
Just like Adam,
We'll live on fruit
CHORUS
BRIDGE
O my Father bless this family,
Bless this journey,
Bless this truck.
We've squeezed our last few pennies in the tank.
Sometimes you humble us,
Before you lift us up.
I hope a poor man's prayer beats money in the bank.
OUTRO CHORUSES and Ad Libs
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Very nice song Sam! I like the lyrics, I love the melody of the chorus and the lyrics too! Your arrangement delivers your song well and is cool. I really like the bridge too!
You have a great voice!
Great job!
Reidmoto
July 29, 2018
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1) Interesting song. 2) Did NOT like piano part on bridge (amateurish). 3) Lyrics grab my attention, more so than the music. 4) You might want to think about having someone who’s really solid musically to work on this song with you—your gift seems to be on the lyric side of the house. 5)I will not forget your lyrics! —Best of luck!
July 31, 2018
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Hi Sam, your song has a nice flow, but each sections is well separated. I like the lyric idea. Think you are right, it’s a Country/Blues/Gospel mix = Americana. Good job.
August 02, 2018
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I think this song is well written, however it’s a little too positive for someone who is losing everything. More to that point, in the bridge you wrote about squeezing the last few pennies in the tank, but back then a penny was worth a lot more than today, a LOT more.
Are you the vocalist as well? Either way, good work!
October 28, 2019
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Reid Yamamoto
Very nice song Sam! I like the lyrics, I love the melody of the chorus and the lyrics too! Your arrangement delivers your song well and is cool. I really like the bridge too!
You have a great voice!
Great job!
Reidmoto
July 29, 2018