MY FLORIDA HOME (written by Jack Speer & Julie Speer, production & vocals by Tim Buppert):
In 2008, Florida’s state song, Down By The Suwannee River, by Stephen Foster, was deemed racially offensive and a contest was launched by the State of Florida to select a new state song. This was the song my wife, Julie, and I submitted. It’s worth noting that a song was never selected and no further word was ever communicated about this contest. I had considered trying to get this song to Jimmy Buffett...
The lyric takes me to Florida and makes me feel like I’m there. I like your use of alliteration and internal rhymes. Melodically, the music is the same in the chorus as the verses. Also, the music sounds like it’s from a different era.
June 11, 2018
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Liked the chorus—the verse (pardon my bluntness) basically just sits there, imho.
August 11, 2018
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When the sun falls into the Gulf of Mexico,
And Spanish moss dances with the breeze,
As sweet perfume of citrus blooms spills from nearby groves,
Waves of water cool my feet along the beach.
From a seaside grille music fills the salty air,
As Nature’s rhythm ushers in the rising moon,
Whether with someone or all alone, I can find peace there,
My Florida Home.
Verse Like an old friend,
It’s always been a part of me.
Most my memories
Are woven in its tapestry.
From the Everglades and spring fed lakes
To inter-coastal water ways,
I wouldn’t change or rearrange
One yesterday.
Chorus When the sun falls into the Gulf of Mexico,
And Spanish moss dances with the breeze,
As sweet perfume of citrus blooms spills from nearby groves,
Waves of water cool my feet along the beach.
From a seaside grille music fills the salty air,
As nature’s rhythm ushers in the rising moon,
Whether with someone or all alone, I can find peace there,
My old Friend, My Florida Home.
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Hi Jack,
I’ve never been to Florida (beside of a 10 hours stay at Miami Airport), but after hearing your song I feel like to go there - very nice imagery! Must be a very nice place for living there. The structure of the song is a a bit unusual and it was difficult for me to tell what’s verse and what’s chorus. If there is a chorus, it doesn’t stand out. Musically it sounds a bit like a song from the 70th, however the musical feeling fits to your lyrics.
June 01, 2018
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The lyric takes me to Florida and makes me feel like I’m there. I like your use of alliteration and internal rhymes. Melodically, the music is the same in the chorus as the verses. Also, the music sounds like it’s from a different era.
June 11, 2018
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Liked the chorus—the verse (pardon my bluntness) basically just sits there, imho.
August 11, 2018
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Hi Jack,
I’ve never been to Florida (beside of a 10 hours stay at Miami Airport), but after hearing your song I feel like to go there - very nice imagery! Must be a very nice place for living there. The structure of the song is a a bit unusual and it was difficult for me to tell what’s verse and what’s chorus. If there is a chorus, it doesn’t stand out. Musically it sounds a bit like a song from the 70th, however the musical feeling fits to your lyrics.
June 01, 2018
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