Had the idea for this song driving home from a 3-hour gig in Canton, not missing a person, just missing having a person to call, or that'd be there when I got back at 2am. It's totally not done, nor am I entirely happy with it...
I recorded this in one take, lyrics are still shakey, I'm new to the vulnerable aspect, thinking about adding another line about loss, but not sure... I dunno... general feedback?
The whole feel is really laid-back and honest. I like the simple imagery… def a keeper! What aren’t you liking about it Nick? The lyrics seem forced-in in terms of syllables, but Josh Ritter-ish and so it works.
August 27, 2013
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Hi Nick, I quite like this, has a “Gordon Lightfoot” feel to it. There does seem to be a lot of words in the verse, maybe you can condense it somewhat. Keep at it. Has a good feel.
August 29, 2013
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The whole feel is really laid-back and honest. I like the simple imagery… def a keeper! What aren’t you liking about it Nick? The lyrics seem forced-in in terms of syllables, but Josh Ritter-ish and so it works.
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Hi Nick, I quite like this, has a “Gordon Lightfoot” feel to it. There does seem to be a lot of words in the verse, maybe you can condense it somewhat. Keep at it. Has a good feel.
August 29, 2013
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Dennis Field
As with all of your songs, I really like this.
August 21, 2013
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