This a folk song about a wrecking crew of a woman. Basic progression with a little bit of grit. Key of F which I'm finding to be comfortable place for me.
This is my first attempt at finishing a "folk" song. Does the story progress well? I wanted to use a three act structure, but don't know if it builds well enough. Do you think there is room for an instrumental section?
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Hey Nick,
Good job with the folksiness! I’d say than it’s still a little more descriptive than narrative, but it suits the song really well. I wouldn’t worry too much about adhering to the 3-act concept. You’re more describing her quirks than their relationship, and the lyrics really get the point across!
It seems that after the third chorus (or title refrain, I guess) you’ve got a good opportunity for an instrumental, but the song may be a little long at this point to include that. Perhaps you could combine parts of the second and third verses and shorten a bit? The second half of the first verse is particularly good. The first portion seems a little rushed with all of the lyrics. LOVE the line “You’ll keep her as long as she’ll stay,” as well as the title line. Gorgeous. You did a great job with all the lyrics of really evoking imagery.
August 02, 2013
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Caryn Womack
Hey Nick,
Good job with the folksiness! I’d say than it’s still a little more descriptive than narrative, but it suits the song really well. I wouldn’t worry too much about adhering to the 3-act concept. You’re more describing her quirks than their relationship, and the lyrics really get the point across!
It seems that after the third chorus (or title refrain, I guess) you’ve got a good opportunity for an instrumental, but the song may be a little long at this point to include that. Perhaps you could combine parts of the second and third verses and shorten a bit? The second half of the first verse is particularly good. The first portion seems a little rushed with all of the lyrics. LOVE the line “You’ll keep her as long as she’ll stay,” as well as the title line. Gorgeous. You did a great job with all the lyrics of really evoking imagery.
August 02, 2013
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