Bob Abner gave feedback on Preacher's Son & Whiskey

Some quite nice stuff going on in this one: 1) VOCALS—good and solid 2) LYRICS—nice story—though this “general” story has showed up in a number of songs, the addition of the “preacher’s gives it a nice little extra twist. 3) PRODUCTION—very nice 4) MUSIC (chords, melody, etc.)—I thought... Read More

Bob Abner gave feedback on FUNERALS & BIRTHDAYS (REWRITE TO ADD A BRIDGE & PRODUCTION)

Nice tender song—reminds me a little of a cross between David Wilcox and REALLY EARLY Seals & Crofts (back in the days when they had 20 fans, 15 of whom were relatives/close friends—this was back when I REALLY liked the songs they were putting out)—HA!!!  Anyway, I... Read More

Bob Abner gave feedback on Get to You

Good solid lyrics, good subject matter, nice personal feel, vocal intonation is decent (a little touchy on occasion, not enough to distract)—really, the only thing is the fact that you use the same four chords over and over and over—would suggest keeping chords the same on the chorus... Read More

Bob Abner gave feedback on Broken Glass

Marvin, I think you are a very solid lyricist, and not just on a song or two—I notice skill and craft in many of your lyrics—I’m rooting for you and your songwriting success!!!

Bob Abner gave feedback on Cliches

Also, Sam, you might want to check out a song that Jimmy Buffett recorded called “Cliches” (to check out how an established songwriter cleverly uses verbal cliches). Here’s a youtube link to the song:  https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UFMgwdV4-zo (the lyrics are just below the... Read More