Bob Abner gave feedback on Hold On (Version 2)

Two lines in the song that I think are really good starting points (in large part because they’re lyrically specific/evocative/paint a verbal picture): “I know why your key’s in that ignition” and “I know why you went to church on Sunday”—but after those first lines... Read More

Bob Abner gave feedback on These Wheels Heals Me

Noora, I am guessing (1) from your name, and 2) from the song title, that English is not necessarily your first language—When you title the song “These Wheels Heals Me,” you are mixing “singular and plural”—in other words, you would say “These Wheels Heal Me” or “This Wheel Heals Me.”... Read More

Bob Abner gave feedback on Hear That Train

Myrna, first off, I honestly think there is a LOT to like about this song. Vocals are solid, lyrics are first rate, and the song evokes a nice (almost a Nitty Gritty Dirt Band) feel. The only thing that jumped out at me that might be changed—at the end... Read More

Bob Abner gave feedback on Get to You

Michael, a small idea (concerning chord changes)—on the verse, a very simple way to add a little “harmonic diversity/color” would be to have, ON THE VERSE, the bass player play the 5 the whole way through the verse—for instance, the chords then become “4/5 1/5 6min/5 5” [if you’re in... Read More

Bob Abner gave feedback on Get to You

First off (on the positive side), 1) I think this one is commercial sounding, and 2) I thought the lyrics were quite solid. On the flip side, 1) noticeable intonation problems with lead vocals, and 2) TOO MUCH (chord changes) “4 1 6min 5” (over and over)—I did notice that, on the bridge, you switched the... Read More