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This is a re-submission of the first song i shared on frettie about trying to get to the girl you love no matter what happens.
Thanks to Kris Krumal for some inspiring feedback which helped me dig a little deeper on the lyrics of the chorus, cheers to you.
Michael, a small idea (concerning chord changes)—on the verse, a very simple way to add a little “harmonic diversity/color” would be to have, ON THE VERSE, the bass player play the 5 the whole way through the verse—for instance, the chords then become “4/5 1/5 6min/5 5” [if you’re in the key of D, the chords in the verse become “G/A D/A Bmin/A A”
Anyway, it was just a thought that occurred to me of a SIMPLE way to 1) add a little more color into your song, and 2) add a little more energy into your verse, which will then help to set up your chorus better.
October 31, 2018
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Hi Bob, thankyou for taking the time and listen. Appreciate your extensive feedback in regards to the music structure and will take it on board.
Cheers
November 12, 2018
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The plane touches down like a hammer to the ground
And my heart skips a beat
My whole world stops I think of you
The only thing I see
You’re Sitting on the couch reading by the fire
Smiling back at me
Well I thank the lord
That i’m goin’ home to everything I need
CHORUS
Life can throw a curveball, or drive you off the road
Sometimes you’re in control, sometimes you just gotta let go
Tear thru the eye of a hurricane, whatever it takes
I’ll get to you, I’ll get to you
Drivin’ down town I hear a screeching sound
The truck ahead brakes suddenly
My whole world stops I think of you
And the only thing i see
Are those winter nights, pumpkin spice
And our morning routine
I know in times like these
Your loving arms is where i wanna be
(So) Life can throw a curveball, or drive you off the road
Sometimes you’re in control, sometimes you just gotta let go
Claw thru the ice of a snow storm, whatever it takes
I’ll get to you, I’ll get to you
Rain or shine, you’re my peace of mind
I swear, all my life I’ve been dying to get to you
I hear shots ring out as i’m standin’ in a crowd,
My heart skips a beat
The whole world stops but you’re standing there:
Everything i need
(So) Life can throw a curveball, or drive you off the road
Sometimes you’re in control, sometimes you just don’t know
Scour the ends of the earth for you, for the rest of my days
I’ll get to, I’ll get to you,
Life can throw a curveball, or drive you off the road
Sometimes you’re in control, sometimes you just gotta let go
Conquer every mountain, whatever it takes
I’ll get to you, I’ll get to you,
Get to you, Get to you, Get to you, Get to you
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First off (on the positive side), 1) I think this one is commercial sounding, and 2) I thought the lyrics were quite solid. On the flip side, 1) noticeable intonation problems with lead vocals, and 2) TOO MUCH (chord changes) “4 1 6min 5” (over and over)—I did notice that, on the bridge, you switched the chords to “2min 1 6min 5—that’s ALMOST the exact same chord changes—fwiw, way too many songwriters have worn out this chord sequence—my suggestion: make more of a difference between the chords in your verse, chorus and bridge. Best wishes to you in your songwriting endeavors.
October 31, 2018
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Michael, a small idea (concerning chord changes)—on the verse, a very simple way to add a little “harmonic diversity/color” would be to have, ON THE VERSE, the bass player play the 5 the whole way through the verse—for instance, the chords then become “4/5 1/5 6min/5 5” [if you’re in the key of D, the chords in the verse become “G/A D/A Bmin/A A”
Anyway, it was just a thought that occurred to me of a SIMPLE way to 1) add a little more color into your song, and 2) add a little more energy into your verse, which will then help to set up your chorus better.
October 31, 2018
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Hi Bob, thankyou for taking the time and listen. Appreciate your extensive feedback in regards to the music structure and will take it on board.
Cheers
November 12, 2018
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Bob Abner
First off (on the positive side), 1) I think this one is commercial sounding, and 2) I thought the lyrics were quite solid. On the flip side, 1) noticeable intonation problems with lead vocals, and 2) TOO MUCH (chord changes) “4 1 6min 5” (over and over)—I did notice that, on the bridge, you switched the chords to “2min 1 6min 5—that’s ALMOST the exact same chord changes—fwiw, way too many songwriters have worn out this chord sequence—my suggestion: make more of a difference between the chords in your verse, chorus and bridge. Best wishes to you in your songwriting endeavors.
October 31, 2018
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