Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on Cavalier Girl

Hey, never mind my “cavalier” comment above.  I was thinking of it as a noun and not an adjective.  I learned something also!  Sorry… Phillip

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on Picture in a Drawer

I’d consider dropping the word “just” in the last line of the chorus, to add a little more emphasis to the title.  Would also give a pause before the payoff. Can’t put my finger on it, but the line “I used to see my life” doesn’t... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on Cavalier Girl

Hi Amber!  I get where you’re going with the song, but I don’t understand the title.  By definition, I don’t get how a woman can be cavalier. Also, you’ve got a point of view problem in the chorus.  The whole song is you... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on Titanic

Had another idea on the title.  You could change it to “My Titanic”, which makes it more personal and not about the actual ship.  Then change the line in the chorus to “You’re my Titanic”. Just a thought… Phillip

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on Titanic

I like the overall theme and concept, but not sure on the title.  Referencing the Titanic has negative connotations for a lot of people.  Maybe a title like “Sail On”, and change the first chorus line instead of “So sail”.  You could still use Titanic in the... Read More