Jayne Sachs gave feedback on One Kiss

A sweet plea to make the relationship better!  As a listener I am so interested in learning more about this couple so I can also visualize their problems.  I’d love to be able to picture some of what you pictured when you wrote it.  Does she... Read More

Jayne Sachs gave feedback on Shame On Me

Hi Marvin, great job!  I LOVE the line “Shame on me for loving you with my eyes closed so tight”.  That’s a killer line!  Very simple song and heartfelt.

Jayne Sachs gave feedback on Beautiful Scars

Hey Gregg, there’s SO much about this that I absolutely love!  I love the imagery you have in the first verses.  I think you paint such a fantastic picture that you actually don’t need to say the first line “A rough and rowdy child, I tried... Read More

Jayne Sachs gave feedback on DID YOU EVER HAVE A SON

I like this Jack.  It’s moving. If you were trying to make it as commercial as possible, I could offer suggestions… but this seems very straight from your heart as is.  Knowing it’s your story makes me feel it even more.  Good job.

Jayne Sachs gave feedback on I Don't Fight Alone

Sorry- got kicked off internet… anyway it would be cool to hear the first two lines of the chorus repeat exactly in the same way on lines 3 and 4… with internals repeated too.  Just an idea.  Good job.