Jayne Sachs gave feedback on Read My Eyes (Edited)

Thank you for your compliment Sonya.  I’m glad the feedback has helped.  That is what this community is all about!  When I co-write, I tend to hook up with music/melody people for the country genre so I can concentrate on bringing lyrics, etc.. It sounds... Read More

Jayne Sachs gave feedback on Read My Eyes (Edited)

Hey Sonya!  Good job on the rewrite!  I see your rhyme scheme now and to my ear as I read it out loud, it has a rhythm.  I would just maybe direct you to the chorus. My ear was craving a rhyme to the hook.  Something... Read More

Jayne Sachs gave feedback on Is That Her

I really like this!  Cool tag to hook… “or is it just me”.  When the first Ch hit, I was thinking the “her” in the song did him wrong.. then by the next CH I realized he was stuck on this other person as in an affair. ... Read More

Jayne Sachs gave feedback on "I'M PICKING UP A GOD BAD HABIT"

Hey Robert, it’s a positive tempo song, so that is always a plus. I feel like there is detail missing.  You could grab the listener’s attention right away with some imagery/detail that lets us feel why he is feeling the way he is… help us visualize... Read More

Jayne Sachs gave feedback on Made for Shades

Interesting and fun song Phillip.  I agree with Brent.  Also, I would take a look at all the lyrics and try to make them as conversational as possible,  ie.. “I pop a sly smile as I take quickie look Current status partner swings a blindin’ right hook” ... Read More