This is actually a song I wrote after thinking of life without my current girlfriend...not technically a breakup song...
I'm not in love with the lyrical structure of the song. Any thoughts?
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You say we're better off as friends
It's just not working out
Not the same kids that we were
We're both too different now
I know how this all goes
'Cause I am guilty too
You'll walk away from here
And all but disappear.
Saying we'll be friends
was the easiest way to do it
But being you're friend
Can be a little lonely
I've found that lonely's
Really not that bad
I'm back where I began
Dinner's cheap and I do just what I please
But I still wanna be with you
I still wanna be with you
I still wanna be with you
With you
It's been long enough
And I've found myself a good one
Not just a rerun
Where the film's already set.
She's not like anyone
With her spirit so free
She's everything and I kinda love her
But I think that she knows
That I still wanna be with you
I still wanna be with you
I still wanna be with you
With you
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Great production. The guitar effects fill the sound out nicely while still keeping it simple pop. Melody and lyrics are good and fit the mood, but I feel you could go higher in the second half of each verse, then even higher and more passionate or longing for the chorus. Harmonies might take care of that if you’re planning to keep the vocal cut.
Well done.
February 21, 2015
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Matt Rees
Great production. The guitar effects fill the sound out nicely while still keeping it simple pop. Melody and lyrics are good and fit the mood, but I feel you could go higher in the second half of each verse, then even higher and more passionate or longing for the chorus. Harmonies might take care of that if you’re planning to keep the vocal cut.
Well done.
February 21, 2015
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