You told me goodbye
Said I didn't try
You took me by surprise
And I couldn't hide
And I am bruised
You gave up on me
Before we were through
You said my time
Was a lie
Then told me that I had to choose
Between Life and your calculating views
You said to comeback
When you can fall in line
And I can't be
What you want
Your insecurities don't excuse
Putting me down
You said we're better together
But I felt small
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I had a tough time understanding the story with this song. The description above helped, but I think listeners who may not have that on hand, could find it tough.
My biggest bit of feedback is that I didn’t feel the “hook” to pull me into this like some of your others songs.
You have a really captivating feel/sound to your music, so that drew me in, but I was always searching for more.
Hope this helps!
Thanks for sharing.
February 04, 2014
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Dennis Field
I had a tough time understanding the story with this song. The description above helped, but I think listeners who may not have that on hand, could find it tough.
My biggest bit of feedback is that I didn’t feel the “hook” to pull me into this like some of your others songs.
You have a really captivating feel/sound to your music, so that drew me in, but I was always searching for more.
Hope this helps!
Thanks for sharing.
February 04, 2014
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