To someone I may never get back, and may never get over.
Any kind of feedback would be awesome!
Lachelle,
Thanks for sharing. Perfect image to help tell the story. I immediately got a sense to what this was going to be about before even hearing it.
Love the blues feel to this. The way you carry me through the story with subtle variations in your singing is really nice.
This has a classic feel to it that allows the lyrics to be showcased. The chorus is really memorable to me. The bridge (if it’s the bridge) could maybe be slightly shortened.
I look forward to following along with the other feedback that you receive.
January 17, 2014
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The way you say “little old me” is haunting. . An idea when you sing that like in the middle, or maybe the end, try going high to your falsetto “little old meeeEEE”. That would add an epic touch especially with your voice!
Great song altogether. I could see putting this song on my playlist.
January 23, 2014
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Another good song by Lachelle. You paint really nice pictures with your lyrics. And I think you did a good job of describing someone who knows it’s over, but deep, deep inside holds onto hope that there is still something there. You made me believe the emotion.
My only critique is that I think your bridge (“am I wasting my life….”) is too long. I felt like you could just hit the first 2 lines and get back into the chorus and it would be more effective. (Oops - I just noticed that Dennis said that too.)
March 20, 2014
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Dick,
Thanks! I’ve always hated that bridge… haha. My next project will be to find a way to shorten it and perfect it. Especially since this will probably be the next recorded song.
March 20, 2014
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Little Old Me
I told myself
Told myself I wouldn’t hit the ground
But I fell easily, I came crashin’ down.
I prayed to God
Prayed to God it didn’t make a sound
Can you still hear my cries though you’re not around?
And though I knew you wouldn’t break my fall
I still expected you to see
And now I wonder if you care at all,
About little old me.
I’m cavin’ in
I’m second-guessing what I thought was right
And what I said to you, in my fear and fright.
But nothing’s changed
We’re still the same mess we were that night.
And I’m still wishing life would be that black and white.
And though I knew you wouldn’t break my fall
I still expected you to see
And now I wonder if you care at all,
About little old me.
Am I wastin’ my life and my time and my words
On somethin’ that’s gone now and never to return?
Am I so blind and too naïve to see
That you aren’t waiting any longer for me?
And though I knew you wouldn’t break my fall
I still expected you to see
And now I wonder if you care at all,
About little old me.
And though the ending was abrupt and tough
I'd hoped you’d stick around to see
If maybe part of you is still in love
With little old me.
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Lachelle! I really like this song a lot! You are very talented and I really like the emotion and the story the song paints.
January 16, 2014
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Lachelle,
Thanks for sharing. Perfect image to help tell the story. I immediately got a sense to what this was going to be about before even hearing it.
Love the blues feel to this. The way you carry me through the story with subtle variations in your singing is really nice.
This has a classic feel to it that allows the lyrics to be showcased. The chorus is really memorable to me. The bridge (if it’s the bridge) could maybe be slightly shortened.
I look forward to following along with the other feedback that you receive.
January 17, 2014
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The way you say “little old me” is haunting. . An idea when you sing that like in the middle, or maybe the end, try going high to your falsetto “little old meeeEEE”. That would add an epic touch especially with your voice!
Great song altogether. I could see putting this song on my playlist.
January 23, 2014
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Another good song by Lachelle. You paint really nice pictures with your lyrics. And I think you did a good job of describing someone who knows it’s over, but deep, deep inside holds onto hope that there is still something there. You made me believe the emotion.
My only critique is that I think your bridge (“am I wasting my life….”) is too long. I felt like you could just hit the first 2 lines and get back into the chorus and it would be more effective. (Oops - I just noticed that Dennis said that too.)
March 20, 2014
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Dick,
Thanks! I’ve always hated that bridge… haha. My next project will be to find a way to shorten it and perfect it. Especially since this will probably be the next recorded song.
March 20, 2014
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Julie Field
Lachelle! I really like this song a lot! You are very talented and I really like the emotion and the story the song paints.
January 16, 2014
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