Got the idea based on a remark a friend made about a "box of broken things".
Interested in knowing whether the "story" makes sense and the metaphor is effective. I decided to use all major chords despite the sad undertones, and am wondering whether that works. I feel like the chorus is catchy, but am certainly open to feedback on that.
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She said there’s something I need to show you
And she took a wooden box from off the shelf
I have saved lots of special things through the years
And I’ve not shown them to anybody else
From the box she took out a small figure of an angel
Whose wings had long ago been broken off
She set it gently in the palm of my hand
And explained in a voice so sweet and soft
This is my box of broken things
That have meant so much to me along the way
Broken things can still be beautiful
I just can’t bring myself to throw them away
One by one small treasures she removed for me to see
And for each there was a cracked or broken part
But each one had a story and I understood
Why they held a special place inside her heart
Like pieces of a puzzle things lay scattered on the floor
And the hours passed happily away
Eventually the wooden box was emptied of its things
And it was then that her smile began to fade
This is my box of broken things
That have meant so much to me along the way
Broken things can still be beautiful
I just can’t bring myself to throw them away
She hung her head and began to cry
I’m broken, she whispered in my ear
Oh won’t you tell me that I’m beautiful
And always keep me near
This is my box of broken things
That have meant so much to me along the way
Broken things can still be beautiful
I just can’t bring myself to throw them away
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