This song is asking some one to stay. As the heart transcends in the openness of ones soul you try and make the right decision by either letting go or holding on.
Special thanks to Joey Hendrickson for engineering/producing this for me. Also thanks to Ethan (violin) and Erik Rau (percussion) I would like as much feedback as possible. This song will be on my demo.
awesome, Orion. loving the arrangement/instrumentation! I love how the percussion drops out at the end of the chorus. I like how in your description you mention openness of the soul, cuz this song really feels like looking straight into a soul. I agree with Eric, some harmonies on the chorus would be tiiight, and up the emotion even more. I also love the vocal walk up on the last chorus. great job man!
January 06, 2014
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Orion - this has a beautiful melody and is really well produced. I particularly like the mandolin chords in the background in stategic places. I think this song could be stronger and more universal in appeal if it had stronger story. (Recognize that I may be missing something because there weren’t lyrics to follow.)
At first, it sounded like all your angst was based on a hypothetical (what if you lied….). But later you say something about “our last night”. But the vagueness left me wondering what happened? I wouldn’t suggest that you tell us a detailed story. But rather, show us a few tidbits of the conflict/problem, which would enable us to more strongly relate to the angst you are feeling in the chorus.
The song, in my opinion, could stand on it’s own as is. But I think some lyric modifications could make it stronger.
Love your voice and guitar work…..
January 12, 2014
Dick,
It’s so interesting to see someone explain things so easily.
When you write about someone else’s song they should listen.
Great advice again and again. Also thank you Eric and Andrew.
January 24, 2014
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VS 1
What if you lied
What if you left me
How would I feel inside
What would I do
Where would I go
I don’t really know
Chorus
My heart would feel
My Soul would heal
Please don’t run away from me
VS 2
The things that you said and
All the memories wrapped up inside my head
As I laid down that final night I think about the times
Chorus 2
My heart would feel
Your soul would heal
Please don’t run away from me
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Wow, this is awesome!
I think it would do well with some harmonies, or even just double tracking your vocals. Good vibes all the way.
December 22, 2013
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awesome, Orion. loving the arrangement/instrumentation! I love how the percussion drops out at the end of the chorus. I like how in your description you mention openness of the soul, cuz this song really feels like looking straight into a soul. I agree with Eric, some harmonies on the chorus would be tiiight, and up the emotion even more. I also love the vocal walk up on the last chorus. great job man!
January 06, 2014
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Orion - this has a beautiful melody and is really well produced. I particularly like the mandolin chords in the background in stategic places. I think this song could be stronger and more universal in appeal if it had stronger story. (Recognize that I may be missing something because there weren’t lyrics to follow.)
At first, it sounded like all your angst was based on a hypothetical (what if you lied….). But later you say something about “our last night”. But the vagueness left me wondering what happened? I wouldn’t suggest that you tell us a detailed story. But rather, show us a few tidbits of the conflict/problem, which would enable us to more strongly relate to the angst you are feeling in the chorus.
The song, in my opinion, could stand on it’s own as is. But I think some lyric modifications could make it stronger.
Love your voice and guitar work…..
January 12, 2014
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Dick,
It’s so interesting to see someone explain things so easily.
When you write about someone else’s song they should listen.
Great advice again and again. Also thank you Eric and Andrew.
January 24, 2014
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Eric Clemens
Wow, this is awesome!
I think it would do well with some harmonies, or even just double tracking your vocals. Good vibes all the way.
December 22, 2013
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