An experimental pop track that utilizes multiple odd time signatures.
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(time meter changes in parenthesis)
(intro: [7/4 x3, 4/4 x 2] x 4)
(verse:[ 7/4 x3, 4/4 x 2] x 2)
sometimes I feel like a kid
I can't stop laughing
it's all because of her
she's got hair the color of
her heart of gold I love
everything about her
(pre-chorus: 3/4 x 6, 4/4 x 4, 7/4 x1)
I once saw my heart as half empty
now it's all the way full
she's irreplaceable
(instrumental chorus: [7/4 x 1, 4/4 x 1, 2/4 x 1] x 2)
(verse: 7/4 x3, 4/4 x 2)
I won't ever let her go
her eyes will let me know
that where we are is right
yeah she's got hair the color of
her heart of gold I love
everything about her
(second pre-chorus: 3/4 x 6, 4/4 x 4, 4/4 x2)
I once saw my heart as half empty
now it's all the way full
she's irreplaceable
(instrumental bridge: [7/4 x3, 4/4 x 2] x 2)
(pre-chorus: 3/4 x 6, 4/4 x 6, 7/4 x1)
I once saw my heart as half empty
now it's all the way full
she's irreplaceable
(instrumental chorus: [7/4 x 1, 4/4 x 1, 2/4 x 1] x 4)
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Andrew - what a great song! The piano fills are perfect and really build momentum. And I love the way you stretch out the word “irreplaceable”. I also love the melody throughout.
My only critique points would be: I would suggest that you find more lyric instead of repeating the last three lines of each verse. Besides, I think there’s room for more description of why she’s irreplaceable. Also (minor point), I would suggest that your “pre-chorus” is really your chorus and the piano parts are just musical interludes between verses.
November 10, 2013
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Dick Plunk
Andrew - what a great song! The piano fills are perfect and really build momentum. And I love the way you stretch out the word “irreplaceable”. I also love the melody throughout.
My only critique points would be: I would suggest that you find more lyric instead of repeating the last three lines of each verse. Besides, I think there’s room for more description of why she’s irreplaceable. Also (minor point), I would suggest that your “pre-chorus” is really your chorus and the piano parts are just musical interludes between verses.
November 10, 2013
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