I just wanted to write a song the way I wanted it to be sung to me lol
This is for a male singer, so I will have it demoed with a male voice of course.
Does this song need a bridge?
Hi Kriz, This is a pretty song, I like the melody. As for a bridge I think as James suggested and then repeat the chorus. I like your song. 
July 24, 2019
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I like it alot…Have you thought of cutting the Chorus in half? IMO it is too long since your verses are long….You could either do 4 lines or use your 5th line to resolve back to the Hook line ‘Looking at my Angel”...That is my thoughts…Good job
July 25, 2019
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The essence of the song is very beuatiful. However, I think that musically it lags a bit. I’d like you to spice it up by adding a pre chorus and definitely a bridge as well. I also like the idea of shortening the chorus and the verses possibly as well, which adding the pre chorus could help with. Also, I am wondering if you could get a bit more specific lyrically, as it comes across a bit too general to sound as emotionally authentic as you are. You’ve got potential here!I look forward to hearing any revisions you might make. Cheers!
July 29, 2019
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There are angels with wing
with halos of gold
There are angels without
some say they come from below
Be that as it may
I don't care what they say
'Cause I never get tired
of looking at mine
Looking at my angel
sweeter than honey
with a smile that brings sunshine
to the darkest of days
I don't know where she came from
but, the way my life's going
I feel the sky has set free
my angel's heaven to me
Every morning I feel
her skin next to mine
Every night her lips speak
and at the same time she's quiet
Nowhere here on Earth
is the someone like her
and that's how I know
(that's) how she's not from below
Looking at my angel ...
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Kriz; I hear what you’re thinking about a bridge, if not a bridge, maybe a step in the key and repeat the chorus a 2nd time with more emotion. Consider removing “Looking at” in the first line of the chorus (Maybe replace with “Oh my…) and hold the 2nd syllable of the last word in the first 3 lines of the chorus. Instead of “Oh my Annnn-gel.” try “Oh my Ange-llllll,” I do like the song though.
July 24, 2019
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Hi Kriz, This is a pretty song, I like the melody. As for a bridge I think as James suggested and then repeat the chorus. I like your song.
July 24, 2019
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I like it alot…Have you thought of cutting the Chorus in half? IMO it is too long since your verses are long….You could either do 4 lines or use your 5th line to resolve back to the Hook line ‘Looking at my Angel”...That is my thoughts…Good job
July 25, 2019
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The essence of the song is very beuatiful. However, I think that musically it lags a bit. I’d like you to spice it up by adding a pre chorus and definitely a bridge as well. I also like the idea of shortening the chorus and the verses possibly as well, which adding the pre chorus could help with. Also, I am wondering if you could get a bit more specific lyrically, as it comes across a bit too general to sound as emotionally authentic as you are. You’ve got potential here!I look forward to hearing any revisions you might make. Cheers!
July 29, 2019
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Kriz; I hear what you’re thinking about a bridge, if not a bridge, maybe a step in the key and repeat the chorus a 2nd time with more emotion. Consider removing “Looking at” in the first line of the chorus (Maybe replace with “Oh my…) and hold the 2nd syllable of the last word in the first 3 lines of the chorus. Instead of “Oh my Annnn-gel.” try “Oh my Ange-llllll,” I do like the song though.
July 24, 2019
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