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When we think of our childhood, our teen years, our twenties, heck, our here and now...you never let go of that idea of wanting to freeze summer. We all want to hold on to that feeling.
Produced by Pearl Snap Studios, Nashville
Thank you for your helpful feedback, RK! I will keep working on Freeze Summer!
August 31, 2019
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Great tune. Not sure I agree with the advice above. I like how after the chorus you bring the listener back to the same scene. I didn’t feel like it was repetitive at all. You changed up the words enough, it’s fine that the rhymes were the same. If anything I already felt like I knew the song and started to hum along without realizing it! Awesome idea for a song, nice work! I also like the latest one you posted. Which is what brought me here in the first place.
July 02, 2020
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“Freeze Summer”
V1
I think I fell in love tonight
Watchin’ you dance by the bonfire light
Smoke in your eyes like you don't care
Wavin' your hands up in the air
Chasing that first kiss...can it always like this
Chorus
We’ll run wild, we’ll run free
We’ll get lost, in the heat
If all we got is each other, we got all we need
Why can’t we...girl, you and me
Why can’t we...just freeze summer
V2
Think I fell in love last night
Watchin’ you sleep, holdin’ you tight
I could wake up with you anywhere
All tangled in your beach blonde hair
Stealin' one more kiss...I’ll always remember this
Repeat Chorus
Bridge
When the nights get to coolin’, ‘n the leaves get to turnin’
September...we both know what that means
Until then…
We’ll run wild, we’ll run free
We’ll get lost, in the heat
If all we got is each other, we've got all we need
Why can’t we...girl, you and me
Why don't we just...yeah
Yeah, we'll run wild, we'll run free
Get ourselves lost in the heat
If we all got is each other, we got all we need
Yeah, why can’t we...girl, you and me
Why can’t we...just freeze summer
Yeah, why don't we freeze summer
(Produced by Pearl Snap Studios, Nashville)
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Hi. This is a good way of trying to say a common theme a little differently, so that’s a real plus. Visuals are good, bonfire, hands in the air, etc. Easy to follow and great demo.
You used the same rhyme sounds in both verses, night, light, etc. and the listener could use a little more variety. Even air, care, hair, etc. is also repetitive. So just vary it more. You’ve got a good idea here, just come up with different words. Good approach!
RK
July 18, 2019
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Thank you for your helpful feedback, RK! I will keep working on Freeze Summer!
August 31, 2019
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Great tune. Not sure I agree with the advice above. I like how after the chorus you bring the listener back to the same scene. I didn’t feel like it was repetitive at all. You changed up the words enough, it’s fine that the rhymes were the same. If anything I already felt like I knew the song and started to hum along without realizing it! Awesome idea for a song, nice work! I also like the latest one you posted. Which is what brought me here in the first place.
July 02, 2020
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Richard Kirk
Hi. This is a good way of trying to say a common theme a little differently, so that’s a real plus. Visuals are good, bonfire, hands in the air, etc. Easy to follow and great demo.
You used the same rhyme sounds in both verses, night, light, etc. and the listener could use a little more variety. Even air, care, hair, etc. is also repetitive. So just vary it more. You’ve got a good idea here, just come up with different words. Good approach!
RK
July 18, 2019
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