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Idea: would you still love me? if I showed you my Girl Heart...
Written with Trevor Peverley
Produced by Pearl Snap Studios, Nashville
Holden, thank you so much for your thoughtful, thorough feedback. I’m still working on the song, so perfect timing. I look forward to checking out your songs. Keep creating! Alexsi
February 25, 2021
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Beautiful song!, It’s very honest. I love the line ” My body, my brain, my love, my insane… . Who is the vocalist? The production is also outstanding as well. This is a song that needs to be on the radio.
February 25, 2021
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Thank you for your kind words, Mark! I work with Pearl Snap Studios in Nashville and the singer is Arianna Hume. She’s amazing!! Looking forward to checking out your music! Alexsi
February 27, 2021
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Alexis,
This song is beautifully written (Hats off to Trevor) and beautifully delivered vocally.The tempo of the song keeps it from being too dark. I really like the lift into the chorus.
My favorite is the 1 line bridge ala Lady A. in “I Need You Now” (Love that song).
The demo is well done.
Great work
February 27, 2021
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Thanks so much Joe! I look forward to listening to your songs. I love that Lady A song too - lots of big feelings! Keep creating! Alexsi
March 06, 2021
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Love the vulnerability here. Nice lyrical turns, clever but accessible. Nice work!! (From another CT writer. I’m in Uncasville, via Greater New Haven!)
April 02, 2021
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Thanks so much, Al! Looking forward to checking out your songs. Keep creating! Alexsi
April 02, 2021
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V1
Too much red wine runnin’ thru my veins
It numbs the pain I’m in
Can I trust what I’m feelin', and believe the words you say
Cause I’ve been here before, high on cloud nine
‘n watched the fairy tale fade away
When I cry, I break, I’m a walkin’ mistake
Yeah, sometimes I feel this way...
CHORUS 1
If I showed you my girl heart
If I opened it all up
Would you like what you see
Or would you just run away from me
Would the things that make me, me
Be the reasons you’d wanna leave
My body, my brain, my love, my insane…
What if I showed you? What if I showed you?
My girl heart
V2
Do you even know what you’re in for
Tears on the bathroom floor
Not some dreamy movie scene, a messed up beautiful thing
You’re all in this time, yeah, you’re really sure
You wouldn’t change me for anything
Oh no...
Watch me fly, so high, I touch the sky
Yeah, sometimes I feel this way...
REPEAT CHORUS 1
Would I be too much or would I never be enough
FINAL CHORUS
If I showed you my girl heart
If I opened it all up
Would you like what you see
Would it bring you closer to me
Would the things that make me, me
Be the reasons you’d never leave
My body, my brain, my love, my insane…
What if I showed you? What if I showed you?
My girl heart
My girl heart...
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I like this song a lot. I like the sophistication of the lyrical meter throughout. I like how the chorus plays and pays off. I love the message of the song- seems fresh to me. I also like the vocals and the production very much - except I don’t like the extra pause between the first verse and chorus, I think it kills the hypnotic vibe. My fav line in your song is this “Would you like what you see, Would it bring you closer to me” - this is a cool change up from the previous lines abut running away. This last chorus hints at hope- like the guy will actually get/appreciate all the different and awesome elements of your Girl Heart. Great work!
February 24, 2021
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Holden, thank you so much for your thoughtful, thorough feedback. I’m still working on the song, so perfect timing. I look forward to checking out your songs. Keep creating! Alexsi
February 25, 2021
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Beautiful song!, It’s very honest. I love the line ” My body, my brain, my love, my insane… . Who is the vocalist? The production is also outstanding as well. This is a song that needs to be on the radio.
February 25, 2021
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Thank you for your kind words, Mark! I work with Pearl Snap Studios in Nashville and the singer is Arianna Hume. She’s amazing!! Looking forward to checking out your music! Alexsi
February 27, 2021
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Alexis,
This song is beautifully written (Hats off to Trevor) and beautifully delivered vocally.The tempo of the song keeps it from being too dark. I really like the lift into the chorus.
My favorite is the 1 line bridge ala Lady A. in “I Need You Now” (Love that song).
The demo is well done.
Great work
February 27, 2021
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Thanks so much Joe! I look forward to listening to your songs. I love that Lady A song too - lots of big feelings! Keep creating! Alexsi
March 06, 2021
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Love the vulnerability here. Nice lyrical turns, clever but accessible. Nice work!! (From another CT writer. I’m in Uncasville, via Greater New Haven!)
April 02, 2021
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Thanks so much, Al! Looking forward to checking out your songs. Keep creating! Alexsi
April 02, 2021
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Holden Forrest
I like this song a lot. I like the sophistication of the lyrical meter throughout. I like how the chorus plays and pays off. I love the message of the song- seems fresh to me. I also like the vocals and the production very much - except I don’t like the extra pause between the first verse and chorus, I think it kills the hypnotic vibe. My fav line in your song is this “Would you like what you see, Would it bring you closer to me” - this is a cool change up from the previous lines abut running away. This last chorus hints at hope- like the guy will actually get/appreciate all the different and awesome elements of your Girl Heart. Great work!
February 24, 2021
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