Brent Baxter

Hey, Alexsi!  Thanks for sharing your song with us.  There’s some good melody/vibe on the verses.  But the chorus feels a little rushed (like you’re cramming too many lyrics in) sometimes.  I like the title, but > makes me think of “greater than” not “less.”  That’s confusing.

Anyway, I hope that helps.  There’s some good work here!  Keep writing!

Martin Vipond

Hi Alexis!  Good song!  Here’s what I noticed.

I like the description of a broken heart as being my heart less you. That’s a unique picture. But, I’d leave out the math symbol. So many people confuse > and < .

I really like the construction of the verse with the melody. Sounds like a few radio cuts lately. Especially verse 1.

I did notice that the chorus melody is exactly the same as the verses until the last couple of lines. Maybe try lifting the chorus melody up a 3rd?

The chorus has a lot if info in it. Maybe simplify? Recent songs have a lot of 3s. Three lines with the same melody, then a payoff line with a different rhythm and melody.
Maybe try

I’m a party of one.
Heart broken in two,
Still fallin apart….  my heart…  Less you.

Still, I like what you’ve got going here.  I hope this helps.

Alexsi Mallory

Brent and Martin,

Thank you so much for your thorough feedback! This helps me moving forward with things I need to address. And you’re right about the < and > signs. I typically think “greater” because that’s how it’s used more today. I was testing that out - trying to get cute with the title. LOL.

I will keep at it!

Corey Bourque

Great job with this one

Marilyn Oakley

Nice write, Alexsi, and love your song. Good job!