Realizing in an instant that you've found someone who can change your life
Lyric, Melody, Instrumentals, Commercial Appeal
Hi Lee,
Thank you for taking the time to listen and feed back. It’s really appreciated. This song was a co-write and I did the melody and music. I agree with some of your points, and as in any work of art, the perspective is all with the listener (or viewer). Personally, I believe in the “suspension of disbelief.” When I first read the lyric, I felt a different timeline, of you will. It seemed to me that the words were a reflection from the point of the writer. A “looking back” at how two people met, and how that “instant of time” led to the here and now. Hence, the last verse illustrates how that moment led to a union that was right, and a reflection on how it changed his life. As for me, I’m always trying to improve on my lyrics writing. Ivm the lyricist on several other songs, and I try to keep the story clear for the listener. Sometimes I succeed and sometimes not so much. My strength has always been in the music and melody, but I’m working on the whole package. Again, thanks for the feedback. I’ll have to check in and listen to your stuff soon….
Warm regards,
Jeff
March 16, 2019
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It was June maybe July, you seemed a little shy,
I was leaning back against the bar
I was there to hang around, taking in the sound,
but it all seemed so bizarre
For I knew just when you I saw you, you’d be mine in a matter of days
I couldn’t say how I knew it through the haze
I’d been watching and waiting, too much hesitating,
but lady luck would charge the door
Felt my life was in a fix, you put it in the mix,
you kept me coming back for more
You would change my life forever, I knew love would reserve a place
But for me the only question was time and space
And in an Instant of Time
My world was redefined
I learned not to keep the score
But to strive for something more
You’re my instant of, you’re my instant of time
My heart was in a knot, wondering when and where and what,
I caught your eye across the room
It was only once or twice, but there was no surprise,
We held hands and love did bloom
You forgave my fumbled whispers and your touch said it’s all okay
You looked into my soul, I had to stay
And in an Instant of Time
My world was redefined
I learned not to keep the score
But to strive for something more
You’re my instant of, you’re my instant of time
You could never do me wrong, you listen to my song,
your tender touch is all brand new
I’d could never put a price on shedding my disguise,
I can finally be true
I have waited in the shadows, now my inner self can speak his name
You showed me I could love and stake my claim
And in an Instant of Time
My world was redefined
I learned not to keep the score
But to strive for something more
You’re my instant of, you’re my instant of time
And in an Instant of Time
How love can be sublime
I learned not to keep the score
But to strive for something more
You’re my instant of, you’re my instant of time
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Hi Jeff,
This is an excellent production. But, for me, there are a few bumps.
First, the song’s title. It’s redundant to say “Instant of Time” when an “instant” means a precise moment of time. This title may cause clarity issues for the listener. Thus, the title may need reworking.
Second, the song’s believability. We’d all like to believe in love at first sight. I believe it can happen. Your song reminds me of Rogers and Hammerstein’s “Some Enchanted Evening” when two strangers make eye contact across a room and romance appears to be on the horizon. Still, when love at first sight happens in life or in song, it may be surprising but it is usually believable. That’s where this song may need some tweaking.
The third verse especially may need attention. Here, it’s unlikely that two strangers, who have just met in a crowded and presumably loud bar, can simply hold hands and cause love to “bloom.”
Also, there may be a bit of mind reading as the singer has no way of knowing that the stranger “looked into my soul.”
Revising in the above areas could take this excellently-produced song to the next level.
All the best in your songwriting.
March 16, 2019
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Hi Lee,
Thank you for taking the time to listen and feed back. It’s really appreciated. This song was a co-write and I did the melody and music. I agree with some of your points, and as in any work of art, the perspective is all with the listener (or viewer). Personally, I believe in the “suspension of disbelief.” When I first read the lyric, I felt a different timeline, of you will. It seemed to me that the words were a reflection from the point of the writer. A “looking back” at how two people met, and how that “instant of time” led to the here and now. Hence, the last verse illustrates how that moment led to a union that was right, and a reflection on how it changed his life. As for me, I’m always trying to improve on my lyrics writing. Ivm the lyricist on several other songs, and I try to keep the story clear for the listener. Sometimes I succeed and sometimes not so much. My strength has always been in the music and melody, but I’m working on the whole package. Again, thanks for the feedback. I’ll have to check in and listen to your stuff soon….
Warm regards,
Jeff
March 16, 2019
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Lee Myers
Hi Jeff,
This is an excellent production. But, for me, there are a few bumps.
First, the song’s title. It’s redundant to say “Instant of Time” when an “instant” means a precise moment of time. This title may cause clarity issues for the listener. Thus, the title may need reworking.
Second, the song’s believability. We’d all like to believe in love at first sight. I believe it can happen. Your song reminds me of Rogers and Hammerstein’s “Some Enchanted Evening” when two strangers make eye contact across a room and romance appears to be on the horizon. Still, when love at first sight happens in life or in song, it may be surprising but it is usually believable. That’s where this song may need some tweaking.
The third verse especially may need attention. Here, it’s unlikely that two strangers, who have just met in a crowded and presumably loud bar, can simply hold hands and cause love to “bloom.”
Also, there may be a bit of mind reading as the singer has no way of knowing that the stranger “looked into my soul.”
Revising in the above areas could take this excellently-produced song to the next level.
All the best in your songwriting.
March 16, 2019
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