This is a story of redemption and forgiveness through the power of love.
Any feed back is welcome! Thank you!
Hey Kristina, the things I notice: the whole song has sort of a “run-on feel”—in other words, musically the verse sorta runs into the “pre-chorus” which basically runs into the chorus. The different parts of a song should be distinct from one another. I WOULD keep the G/A—> A at the end of the chorus (where the lyrics are “your love made me believe”). And not only does the music sort of run together, but the lyrics also don’t paint enough of a clear picture (for my tastes). Also, you might want to spend some time setting up your rhyme schemes a little more “intentionally.” Anyway, that’s simply my opinion. Best wishes in your songwriting endeavors!
August 24, 2018
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1 I slam the hood down on my old rusty Ford
Our kids are playing tag out in the yard
Catch you smiling at me from the kitchen window
Little blessings I never thought I’d know
PC Until your love made me believe
Ch: There’s such a thing as comebacks and second chances
Forgiveness no matter what the past has been
In spite of all my mistakes you saw something good in me
Your love made me believe
V2 I had a list of petty crimes from my youth
Would sooner climb a tree than tell the truth
Thought nothing about drinking through every day
Didn’t see a reason to change my ways
PC Until your love made me believe
Ch: There’s such a thing as comebacks and second chances
Forgiveness no matter what the past has been
In spite of all my mistakes you saw the good in me
And your love made me believe
Br: Don’t know what you saw in that dark heart of mine
But you poured into me like fresh sun—shine
Ch: Repeat
Made Me Believe….:II 3x and out
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Hi Kristina, your lyric has a good start with very nice imagery. I think your chorus could be more catchy, if you only would rhyme at least the hook line. It feels like you have only focused on the message. Also the chorus melody doesn’t separate the chorus section from the verse section enough. The chorus doesn’t stand out that much.
These are only my thoughts while listening to your song. I’m not a pro and I may be wrong. Hope you have fun with your songwriting.
August 24, 2018
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Hey Kristina, the things I notice: the whole song has sort of a “run-on feel”—in other words, musically the verse sorta runs into the “pre-chorus” which basically runs into the chorus. The different parts of a song should be distinct from one another. I WOULD keep the G/A—> A at the end of the chorus (where the lyrics are “your love made me believe”). And not only does the music sort of run together, but the lyrics also don’t paint enough of a clear picture (for my tastes). Also, you might want to spend some time setting up your rhyme schemes a little more “intentionally.” Anyway, that’s simply my opinion. Best wishes in your songwriting endeavors!
August 24, 2018
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Hi Kristina, your lyric has a good start with very nice imagery. I think your chorus could be more catchy, if you only would rhyme at least the hook line. It feels like you have only focused on the message. Also the chorus melody doesn’t separate the chorus section from the verse section enough. The chorus doesn’t stand out that much.
These are only my thoughts while listening to your song. I’m not a pro and I may be wrong. Hope you have fun with your songwriting.
August 24, 2018
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