From wishing I was dead to thanking God that I'm alive... I thank God Who was fully expressed and represented in the person of Jesus Christ.
Melody and Lyrics by: Haydee Ahrens
I am open to any feedback.
Good subject matter (being thankful is ALWAYS in season, and not just the end of November)—on the one hand, you have a strong voice (in your upper range)—however, 1) during the verses, your melody doesn’t necessarily fit with your chords, and 2) sometimes there’s a little problem with intonation.
Back to my initial comment: ALWAYS feel free to write about having a thankful heart—we ALL need more of that! Best of luck in your songwriting endeavors!!!
August 06, 2018
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I Thank God
I feel so elated
As I feel this song
Rise up in me
As you're holding me
so tenderly,
I have to thank God.
I have known
The darkness.
In it I lived
And couldn't breathe.
In it I would
Dwell eternally.
And I thank my God.
I thank God,
Know He's good and true,
I know this
When I see you.
I wouldn't be here,
You wouldn't be near,
If not for Him,
So I thank my God.
I remember when I
Wanted pleasure
Couldn't stand the pain,
Knew that it was all
In vain,
Knew I couldn't win.
Couldn't wash
The shame off.
Wanted to be covered
Cleansed within,
Wanted to die
Or start again.
And I thank my God.
I thank God,
Know He's good and true.
I know this
When I see you.
I wouldn't be here,
You wouldn't be near,
If not for Him.,
So I thank my God.
I thank God,
Blessed is His name.
I thank God,
I'll never be the same.
His nature's
Been displayed
By all things
He has made
So I praise Him!
And I thank my God!
I wouldn't be here,
You wouldn't be near,
If not for Him,
So I thank my God!
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I not sure how feedback works and wanted to get back to you (not sure to do it here or on my songs feedback area).
Thanks for the feedback on my Mother’s Special Day song. It was interesting that you pointed out that you thought the line “she had no skills” referred to the mother. At that point in the song I was still referring to a baby. Maybe I should have inserted the word “I” to make it clearer. Feedback is important, because other’s see things we don’t. Please listen to my (Larry Psl) other 2 songs posted, one is about a relationship that worked, the other is a high energy “motivational” rock song.
Once again, thanks for taking the time to listen and comment.
I listened to your three songs. Regarding your “I Thank God” song, I like stories, your story went from talking about a friend and then to you, back and forth and back. I would have placed the first verse maybe second and build. But that is just me.
April 21, 2018
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Good subject matter (being thankful is ALWAYS in season, and not just the end of November)—on the one hand, you have a strong voice (in your upper range)—however, 1) during the verses, your melody doesn’t necessarily fit with your chords, and 2) sometimes there’s a little problem with intonation.
Back to my initial comment: ALWAYS feel free to write about having a thankful heart—we ALL need more of that! Best of luck in your songwriting endeavors!!!
August 06, 2018
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Larry Palaszynski
I not sure how feedback works and wanted to get back to you (not sure to do it here or on my songs feedback area).
Thanks for the feedback on my Mother’s Special Day song. It was interesting that you pointed out that you thought the line “she had no skills” referred to the mother. At that point in the song I was still referring to a baby. Maybe I should have inserted the word “I” to make it clearer. Feedback is important, because other’s see things we don’t. Please listen to my (Larry Psl) other 2 songs posted, one is about a relationship that worked, the other is a high energy “motivational” rock song.
Once again, thanks for taking the time to listen and comment.
I listened to your three songs. Regarding your “I Thank God” song, I like stories, your story went from talking about a friend and then to you, back and forth and back. I would have placed the first verse maybe second and build. But that is just me.
April 21, 2018