I've been accused (fairly) of having most of my relationship songs being about broken or breaking relationships. This is probably my one "love" song that is positive (in a strange way). Sorry that the production is a little heavy on reverb.
As always - give it to me straight.
Very pleasing sound…almost sorta reminds me of Simon and Garfunkel.
September 05, 2013
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James, now that you say that, It does have a Simon and Garfunkel flair to it. I like that.
September 05, 2013
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Man, I really like the guitar part on this. Very tasty. Nicely produced as well.
Good job.
October 16, 2013
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Dick,
I love the tone of this song, I think that overdubbing the lead vocal was a really nice choice, it gives a really nice and subtle fullness and texture to the song (kind of like Simon and Garfunkle’s more whispery stuff). I’m also very impressed with your vocal control on the harmonies in this song, your intonation is perfect and there were some high note up there. You really delivered and performed this nicely. The blurred meaning of this song is easy to relate to and easy to understand as well, the use of the word “how happy I am since I fell - fell for you” is really good. It also pays reference to the slurred speach line at the start of the song, the unreliable narrator at work. Cool stuff, good ideas.
To critique, while I really like the thought and attention to the general meaning of the song a lot, I also think that the lyrics line to line are pretty straightforward. I apreciate the clarity of your lyrics and voice, it makes comprehension very easy to do, but I also think sometimes it can cut back on your ability to express. I for one am all about the feel of a song, perhaps too much. I sometimes will deliberately make some of my lyrics unclear and then really try to deliver it in the song, hoping that people might go, “Whoah, I felt that but what was that line all about?”
Overall you did a nice job on this Dick, very well executed and it’s nice to hear your stuff online. PS Isn’t Frettie awesome?
November 15, 2013
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Your Love Touches Me
My lips are tingling
My vision is blurred
I fear that if I try to speak
My words will be slurred
My knees want to buckle
My head starts to pound
My ears must be failing
I can’t hear a sound
(chorus)
Some say it’s black magic
You’re a gypsy - casting a spell
Some say you’re the devil
Charming my soul into hell
It’s nothing that evil
No pain - no mystery
It’s just how - your love touches me
My breathing is shallow
My heart pounds away
My life has spun out of control
Complete disarray
Don’t know what the day is
Forgotten the year
Hours keep passing me by
And nothing seems clear
Repeat Chorus
(bridge)
Maybe my friends have figured it out
Maybe there’s really a spell
It doesn’t matter, they don’t realize
How happy I am since I fell - for - you
My breathing has steadied
My hearts slowing down
Maybe there’s hope I will survive
‘Til you come back around
Tag It’s just how, yes it’s how, oh it’s how, your love touches me
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Dick,
You have a way of guiding me into your lyrics and stories. I have noticed that with a number of your songs. I think it is your singing style. I appreciate that.
The first verse really describes the way someone would feel in this moment of love. Unique way of introducing the story. You also carry it through nicely into the first line of the second verse. It creates some nice visuals.
I appreciate you sharing it!
Also, thank you again for taking the time to connect on Monday!
August 27, 2013
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Very pleasing sound…almost sorta reminds me of Simon and Garfunkel.
September 05, 2013
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James, now that you say that, It does have a Simon and Garfunkel flair to it. I like that.
September 05, 2013
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Man, I really like the guitar part on this. Very tasty. Nicely produced as well.
Good job.
October 16, 2013
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Dick,
I love the tone of this song, I think that overdubbing the lead vocal was a really nice choice, it gives a really nice and subtle fullness and texture to the song (kind of like Simon and Garfunkle’s more whispery stuff). I’m also very impressed with your vocal control on the harmonies in this song, your intonation is perfect and there were some high note up there. You really delivered and performed this nicely. The blurred meaning of this song is easy to relate to and easy to understand as well, the use of the word “how happy I am since I fell - fell for you” is really good. It also pays reference to the slurred speach line at the start of the song, the unreliable narrator at work. Cool stuff, good ideas.
To critique, while I really like the thought and attention to the general meaning of the song a lot, I also think that the lyrics line to line are pretty straightforward. I apreciate the clarity of your lyrics and voice, it makes comprehension very easy to do, but I also think sometimes it can cut back on your ability to express. I for one am all about the feel of a song, perhaps too much. I sometimes will deliberately make some of my lyrics unclear and then really try to deliver it in the song, hoping that people might go, “Whoah, I felt that but what was that line all about?”
Overall you did a nice job on this Dick, very well executed and it’s nice to hear your stuff online. PS Isn’t Frettie awesome?
November 15, 2013
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Dick,
You have a way of guiding me into your lyrics and stories. I have noticed that with a number of your songs. I think it is your singing style. I appreciate that.
The first verse really describes the way someone would feel in this moment of love. Unique way of introducing the story. You also carry it through nicely into the first line of the second verse. It creates some nice visuals.
I appreciate you sharing it!
Also, thank you again for taking the time to connect on Monday!
August 27, 2013
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