This is a work tape of version 2, based on some feedback from here on Frettie on the work tape of version 1 - I'd be interested to know if I managed to make it better and captured what the feedback intended 
The original is at http://frettie.com/track_detail/1695
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Verse 1 (her)
When would you guess we first met?
I'll say 6 years ago
At some summer lakeside party
I bet we nodded a quick hello
No way I could see, what you'd come to mean to me
Chorus 1 (her)
Well I don't want to sound like some pickup line
But it really is time we picked your place or mine
We can turn off our phones
Pretend we're just not homeWhat's about to happen's been a long time coming
Chorus 1 b (him)
Well it don't seem to me like some pickup line
Coz your place or mine, yeah I guess that it's time
We can turn down the lights
Slow dance all through the night
Oh what's about to happen's been a long time coming
Verse 2 (him)
First time I remember your face
Firelight glow, campsite sing-a-long
You were with... what was his name?
[You were with... what was her name? (her) ]
We both called out the same favorite song
Now it's all lead to this, love before any first kiss
Chorus 2 (him)
Well I don't want to sound like some pickup line
But it really is time we picked your place or mine
We can turn off our phones
Pretend we're not at home
What's about to happen's been a long time coming
Chorus 2 b (her)
Well it don't sound to me like no pickup line
Coz your place or mine, yeah I guess that it's time
We can turn down the lights
Slow dance all through the night
Oh what's about to happen's been a long time coming
BRIDGE
(her) You were the one who'd fix up my car
(him) And you taught me to dance
(her) I saw you through every broken heart
(him) I was your shoulder through each hard circumstance
Chorus 3 (both)
Well I really got to say what's on my mind
You could be the one for the rest of my life
But let's start with right now
See how it all works out
Oh what's about to happen's been a long time coming
Chorus 3b (both - repeat chorus 1)
Oh I don't want to sound like some pickup line
But your place or mine, yeah it really is time
We can turn off our phones
Pretend we're just not home
Oh what's about to happen's been a long time coming
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PS - it’s still a duet, but I’ve had to sing both parts myself “She” is on the left, “he” is on the right, in the stereo. Just in case that’s confusing at all lol!
February 11, 2018
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PS - it’s still a duet, but I’ve had to sing both parts myself
“She” is on the left, “he” is on the right, in the stereo. Just in case that’s confusing at all lol!
February 11, 2018
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