I think every relationship goes through rough patches, so hopefully listeners can relate to this song. It would probably be best if sung by a female.
Do you connect with the lyrics? I've never found the right music, so if anybody out there has something for it, I'd love to hear it. Even split.
So sadly true after a certain amount of time goes by. Your theme is very relatable! I like Brent’s suggestion to add sounds for some texture.
July 08, 2017
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Brent, thank you for your thoughts and ideas.
I had written these lyrics over a year ago as an experiment in the VVBV format. I usually have a melody and music going through my head as I’m writing, but on this one, I kept finding myself singing to Ronstadt’s Long, Long Time, so I sat it aside to work on other things.
It might be time to revisit it and, as per your suggestion, add a chorus to it.
Thanks,
Phillip
July 08, 2017
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Phillip,
looks like you have a great idea and story. lyrics are not my strengths, so I really liked that you posted this so i could go back through and read comments and learn myself. Great Title.
August 29, 2017
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Are You Listening?
We don't talk much anymore
Or look into each others eyes
Our longest conversation
Is when we say goodnight
Glancing at each other
Our love is drifting
I know you hear me
Are you listening?
A tender kiss beside the fire
Acting out our fantasy
Romantic nights together
Now a distant memory
Our future is in pieces
I have to keep wishing
I know you hear me
Are you listening?
We used to hold hands while walking
Telling each other about our day
Sharing stories, songs and laughter
Heaven, help us find our way
Days keep dragging forward
Tearing slowly at my heart
I don't want to break up
But mending is so hard
Let's not blame each other
We both know what's missing
I know you hear me
Are you listening?
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Hey, Phillip! Thanks for posting your lyrics! I’m glad to see you taking advantage of posting lyrics-only.
Good topic for a song. Sadly relatable to a lot of people. I like the title, and I really like it with the “I know you hear me” setup line. However, you haven’t written to those lines as well as you could. This “I know you hear me, but are you listening” could really flavor the rest of your lyric.
For example, the first verse could be about the sounds in their relationship- and focus on her sounds.
We talk, but you’re not really listening (but don’t use that word). I can see her giving him clues that she’s not happy- but he’s not picking up on them. She plays sad songs. They see a commercial for the beach and she says it would be so romantic, but he kinda blows it off. That kind of thing. That would bring a lot more power to the hook.
Then the chorus could be about how she’s trying to tell him what she needs from him. But he’s not listening. She wants to save their relationship, etc.
It would make it more of a downer, so I don’t suggest it, but the song could end with her zipping a suitcase, closing a door, starting her car. “I know you hear me, maybe now you’ll listen.”
I hope my thoughts have helped! Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song. Thanks!
July 06, 2017
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So sadly true after a certain amount of time goes by. Your theme is very relatable! I like Brent’s suggestion to add sounds for some texture.
July 08, 2017
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Brent, thank you for your thoughts and ideas.
I had written these lyrics over a year ago as an experiment in the VVBV format. I usually have a melody and music going through my head as I’m writing, but on this one, I kept finding myself singing to Ronstadt’s Long, Long Time, so I sat it aside to work on other things.
It might be time to revisit it and, as per your suggestion, add a chorus to it.
Thanks,
Phillip
July 08, 2017
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Phillip,
looks like you have a great idea and story. lyrics are not my strengths, so I really liked that you posted this so i could go back through and read comments and learn myself. Great Title.
August 29, 2017
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Hey, Phillip! Thanks for posting your lyrics! I’m glad to see you taking advantage of posting lyrics-only.
Good topic for a song. Sadly relatable to a lot of people. I like the title, and I really like it with the “I know you hear me” setup line. However, you haven’t written to those lines as well as you could. This “I know you hear me, but are you listening” could really flavor the rest of your lyric.
For example, the first verse could be about the sounds in their relationship- and focus on her sounds.
We talk, but you’re not really listening (but don’t use that word). I can see her giving him clues that she’s not happy- but he’s not picking up on them. She plays sad songs. They see a commercial for the beach and she says it would be so romantic, but he kinda blows it off. That kind of thing. That would bring a lot more power to the hook.
Then the chorus could be about how she’s trying to tell him what she needs from him. But he’s not listening. She wants to save their relationship, etc.
It would make it more of a downer, so I don’t suggest it, but the song could end with her zipping a suitcase, closing a door, starting her car. “I know you hear me, maybe now you’ll listen.”
I hope my thoughts have helped! Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song. Thanks!
July 06, 2017