A standard folk song about the perils of self-inflicted loneliness.
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Born into this world to a small, unequipped girl.
She made her final cries before I breathed.
Now, my daddy, I don't know,
But I've heard he's found a home.
There is nothing in this world I'm meant to keep.
Bounced from home to home like a puppy not condoned.
Climbed over every fence that I could see.
I never made a stand,
Because I have no roots to plant.
There is nothing in this world I'm meant to keep.
Abrupt change of plans: a promise and a hand.
I married the only girl I thought I'd need.
But the winter's got too hard,
And being poor left us both scarred.
There is nothing in this world I'm meant to keep.
Though you know I love you so, that's a risk I can't condone.
You deserve to be treated like a queen.
Since he'll love you all his life,
Have him take you as his wife.
There is nothing in this world I'm meant to keep.
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Nice melody. But it needs more change - bridge, chorus or something.
November 06, 2014
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Nigel Parry
Nice melody. But it needs more change - bridge, chorus or something.
November 06, 2014
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