multi-cheating dude and she is done
Please let me know what you think of the lyrics. Do you get the nursery rhyme and action hero references? Does it grab you? Do you get what she is feeling.
I have used AI to create the melody and singing as I do not have any instrument skills. I hope that isn't "cheating"?
Hey Russ
Thank you for the feedback.
Can you explain a little about what distracts you? What does hokey mean? Do you mean childish or ridiculous?
Cheers
Sonya
February 11, 2026
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V1
Come in to my parlour said the spider to the fly
It seemed like like a good idea I cannot tell a lie
It only took one look caught in those beady eyes
Before I knew what was going on was tangled in your web of lies
Oh! You're just a spider, man
CHORUS (REPEAT)
V2 See you've been entertaining other flies behind my back Who've captured your attention in their silhouette of shiny black Now the touch of your hands well it makes my skin crawl I'm not poisoned paralysed and numb coz you're a toxic hairy ball
Oh! You're just a spider, man
CHORUS (REPEAT)
BRIDGE (MELODY)
Look out ladies Here comes a spider man
CHORUS (REPEAT)
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I get the nursery referenced and think it makes the song sound hokey, but I’m not a millennial, and I can see how they might think it’s cool. The lyrics are good! I kinda get the feeling but distracted by references.
February 10, 2026
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Hey Russ
Thank you for the feedback.
Can you explain a little about what distracts you? What does hokey mean? Do you mean childish or ridiculous?
Cheers
Sonya
February 11, 2026
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Russ DeWolfe
I get the nursery referenced and think it makes the song sound hokey, but I’m not a millennial, and I can see how they might think it’s cool. The lyrics are good! I kinda get the feeling but distracted by references.
February 10, 2026
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