This is a second version of this song, I produced it in Suno Studio with the vocals being the main focus. This is a song about the grief associated with losing yourself after a major illness or injury etc.
I would love any feedback or cowriters, especially for melody/instruments.
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Verse 1
Nobody tells you how fast life can change—
One heartbeat, one moment, then nothing is the same.
The ground gives out beneath you, your whole life disappears,
And you can’t even recognize your reflection in the mirror.
The world keeps on turning like nothing went wrong,
But you’re frozen in this moment while the rest move on.
Chorus
I’m past denial and anger. God, what does that get me?
I’d bargain with the Devil if he'd pull me from this grief.
I didn’t choose this life, I’m just trying to survive it,
While I’m learning to live with this...new version of me.
Verse 2
I keep tracing old footsteps like they’ll lead me home,
But the map has been rewritten, and I walk it alone.
Some days I feel hollow, like a candle burned too low,
Just a quiet kind of loss only I can know.
I’m sifting through the pieces of who I used to be,
Lost in despair, just learning how to breathe.
Chorus
I’m past denial and anger. God, what does that get me?
I’d bargain with the devil if he'd pull me from this grief.
I didn’t choose this life, I’m just trying to survive it,
While I’m learning to live with this...new version of me.
Bridge
I just want to be seen
Not the mask, but what's really left of me.
I look the same, how would they know?
Some of the hardest battles never show.
Chorus / Outro
I’m past denial and anger. God, what does that get me?
I’d bargain with the Devil if he'd pull me from this grief.
I didn’t choose this life, I’m just trying to survive it,
No one ever sees the parts of me still dyin’.
This isn't the life I want, but it's my reality.
And I'm finally learning to love this new version of me.
Oh learning to love me
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Very emotional and relatable. I think of the Wounded Warriors and a friend of mine who was hit by a train. The only thing from my point of view could be reworded is the “I’d bargain with the devil.” It’s powerful, but so certain. I wonder if you could make it more of a consideration to bargain because that might include more people as not everyone surely would. Up to you, of course.
December 16, 2025
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DeeDee Beeler
Very emotional and relatable. I think of the Wounded Warriors and a friend of mine who was hit by a train. The only thing from my point of view could be reworded is the “I’d bargain with the devil.” It’s powerful, but so certain. I wonder if you could make it more of a consideration to bargain because that might include more people as not everyone surely would. Up to you, of course.
December 16, 2025
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