A couple that meets and falls in love. He starts to realize they want fundamentally different things in life (kids vs no kids) and makes the hard choice to walk away rather than one of them giving up their dreams.
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Song is good. Nice subject. I don’t really see the singer as taking the broken heart. That implies to me that she is not going to be broken hearted.
February 11, 2026
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Verse 1
Music was so loud I could feel the bass beatin' like a second heart in my chest
Beer flowing like a penny night, putting my memory to the test.
I saw you dancing with your eyes closed, Smiling at a secret only you could see.
I would have given the state of Texas for that smile to be for me.
Pre-Chorus
Heart in my throat, I couldn't speak, as you led me out for a dance
You made me forget I wasn’t looking for love, made me give it a chance.
Chorus
I’ll give you all my love But I don’t think it’ll be enough.
The more I fall, the more I feel, The less I want to end this rush
What I can give you and what you need are too far apart.
So before this becomes, something we can’t outrun,
I’ll be the one to take the broken heart.
Verse 2
Resting your head, on my chest, listening to my heartbeat
Painting pictures of a future, house and a dog, kids playing in the street
I feel your breath on my neck, smell your rose shampoo, as I choke on the truth.
How do I say I don’t want a picket fence, without you hearing I don’t want you.
[pause}
Chorus
I’m giving all my love, But I don’t think it’ll be enough.
The more I fall, the more I feel, The less I want to end this rush
But what I can give you and what you need are too far apart.
So before this becomes something we can’t outrun,
I’ll be the one to take the broken heart.
Bridge
I’d rather lose you than watch you lose yourself
To give you heaven, I’d have to walk through hell
My ghost is watching my dreams drive away
So before I become someone you hate.
I’ll set you free….and let my heart break.
Chorus
I gave you all my love But It wasn’t enough.
The more I fell, the more I felt, The harder this was to give up
But what I am and what you need are too far apart.
So before this becomes something that can’t be undone,
I’ll walk away and take the broken heart
[fade out]
Oh I’ll take my broken heart….and walk away
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Very good!
Just two places maybe double check: listening to my heartbeat reminds me of a Dr and stethoscope…could it be “hearing” or even changed to something like smiling at me dreaming
Also, my ghost is watching my dreams drive away…change the tense to match the prior two lines
February 10, 2026
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Song is good. Nice subject. I don’t really see the singer as taking the broken heart. That implies to me that she is not going to be broken hearted.
February 11, 2026
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DeeDee Beeler
Very good!
Just two places maybe double check: listening to my heartbeat reminds me of a Dr and stethoscope…could it be “hearing” or even changed to something like smiling at me dreaming
Also, my ghost is watching my dreams drive away…change the tense to match the prior two lines
February 10, 2026
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