Inner wars, hauntings, like wolverines chasing us down and making us believe that love is merely dangerous, vicious, and it was never really our fault.
This is a new style for me. My friend Orion DiFranco found the guitar part and I just matched the lyrics in a co-write. Interested in how the style "feels" and whether or not you want to hear more. Also, what metaphors in the lyrics can you identify?
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Hear them now
Can you hear them all howling out
Crying to the moon beams and transforming
Grinding teeth
Saliva falling from their cheeks
Waiting for the time to strike and do away with me
They're here
We're found
We're fighting hard to win this round
Hear, Hear that sound
We're running fast from wolverines
Every second counts
Viscous teeth
Of the girl that ran away from me
Every night I hear her howling, crying
Crying out
Caught up in her night gown
A silent beast is craving me
The stars
They're all black
Can you see their eyes
And feel the attack
The girl
Starts to chase
From miles and miles and miles away
Maybe I'm,
Maybe I'm the predator
Maybe she's the casualty
And I'm the enemy.
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Hmm really liking the visuals from the lyrics. I think the verse melody (at some points) sounds too “nice” and its confusing because what you’re saying is dark. I really like the vocal droning part. And “Maybe I’m, Maybe I’m the predator, Maybe she’s the casualty, and I’m the enemy” is a great song ender. I like how at first the lyrics are descriptive like quick shots of the setting and then how the chorus starts to move the story along. Lot of potential in this one!
May 31, 2014
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Jack Doran
Hmm really liking the visuals from the lyrics. I think the verse melody (at some points) sounds too “nice” and its confusing because what you’re saying is dark. I really like the vocal droning part. And “Maybe I’m, Maybe I’m the predator, Maybe she’s the casualty, and I’m the enemy” is a great song ender. I like how at first the lyrics are descriptive like quick shots of the setting and then how the chorus starts to move the story along. Lot of potential in this one!
May 31, 2014
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