This is a story of love found and lost and found again, and all of the struggles that go along with making that work...even when two people really love one another.
I'm a complete rookie at this. Joey Hendrickson suggested I submit this song to you for feedback. But I don't really even know what to ask besides: is this a song that has publishing potential? How can I make it better? What should I be asking!!! 
This sounds like a cover of a famous band / songwriter. Everything from the lyrics and the music are easily listenable. There’s hook in both verse and chorus, that catch me.
For example, the verses are reemphasized with repeats. Makes me wonder why I make songwriting so hard and don’t do this more often!
Simple can be effective. I think there is a producer out there who would love to work with this, because there aren’t kinks that make or break the song. The melody is right, and the song structure would be enjoyable to produce.
Wondering what Barbara Cloyd would say about this one.
March 12, 2014
Jaime - like it!
Really nice chorus. The only thing I would suggest is to not use the same word to end a line in a row (eg: “sitting there”, “apart”, “sitting here”). I think when you used the “we’d say/we’d do/we’d feel” pattern, it’s so much more interesting. If you could find a way to do that where you have all the repeats, I think it would be more interesting, too.
Having said all that, I really like the song anyway.
March 13, 2014
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You were sittin' there
And I was sittin' there
And we were sittin' there
And we couldn't know
All the things we'd say
And all the things we'd do
And all the things we'd feel
And we couldn't know
Someday we'd be so in love that everyone could see
All souls all tangled up as one as happy as could be
So, let it be
Let it be amazing
Let it be
Let it be amazing
We were born apart
And we were torn apart
'Cause I made my mistakes
So you couldn't stay
And all the things we said
And all the things we did
And all the things we felt
But you couldn't stay
I would lie awake at night and dream that someday you'd come back
I'd stumble through the day and pray I'd have a chance to ask
Can you let it be?
Let it be amazing?
Let it be
Let it be amazing
Now you're sittin' here
And I am sittin' here
And we are sittin' here
And we cannot guess
All the things we'll say
And all the things we'll do
And all the things we'll feel
So we have to trust
The love that we were handed girl
It came from up on high
Our tangled souls and melted hearts are the very reasons why we should
Let it be
Let it be amazing
Let it be
Let it be amazing
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Hey Jamie, this song’s got a lot going for it. The only thing I’d say to help it out even more is to maybe add a bridge where you’re introducing new chords and/or dynamics.
As I scan different chunks of the song, I am able to drop into any section of it and it still sounds like I’m in the same verse.
I am completely guilty of this too, and it’s hard to add a meaningful bridge to really emphasize the entire song but I think it’s what’s holding the song from being great.
March 10, 2014
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This sounds like a cover of a famous band / songwriter. Everything from the lyrics and the music are easily listenable. There’s hook in both verse and chorus, that catch me.
For example, the verses are reemphasized with repeats. Makes me wonder why I make songwriting so hard and don’t do this more often!
Simple can be effective. I think there is a producer out there who would love to work with this, because there aren’t kinks that make or break the song. The melody is right, and the song structure would be enjoyable to produce.
Wondering what Barbara Cloyd would say about this one.
March 12, 2014
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Jaime - like it!
Really nice chorus. The only thing I would suggest is to not use the same word to end a line in a row (eg: “sitting there”, “apart”, “sitting here”). I think when you used the “we’d say/we’d do/we’d feel” pattern, it’s so much more interesting. If you could find a way to do that where you have all the repeats, I think it would be more interesting, too.
Having said all that, I really like the song anyway.
March 13, 2014
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Adam Tock
Hey Jamie, this song’s got a lot going for it. The only thing I’d say to help it out even more is to maybe add a bridge where you’re introducing new chords and/or dynamics.
As I scan different chunks of the song, I am able to drop into any section of it and it still sounds like I’m in the same verse.
I am completely guilty of this too, and it’s hard to add a meaningful bridge to really emphasize the entire song but I think it’s what’s holding the song from being great.
March 10, 2014