I was inspired to write this song when I was getting a massage from my massage therapist. She and I have known each other for 20 years. She had gotten married, they have a daughter together, and then they divorced. It has not been a nice relationship since. The daughter is now 13 and told her dad that the greatest gift he could possibly give to her was just to love her mom. This statement struck me hard, I have been married and divorced twice, and it caused me to look at my relationship with my exs. It has been shortened, 2 verses have been taken out of this recording. One of them deals with falling out of love and creating conflict. I am unsure of which direction to go with this song. One way I see is to rewrite without any conflict, and the other is to add the conflict back in and shorten the other verses. I thought this would be a really good song for someone like Tim McGraw do record. It is in need of lyrical revision, and would welcome the opportunity to work with someone who believes that the song can reach people, especially those who are divorced, and start them thinking about how they look at the past love in their life. Please let me know what you think and what your ideas are?
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Verse 1
I was just a boy, and you were a precious girl
Since the day we met, we knew there'd be something more.
And when my love felt right, I asked you to be my wife
To have and to hold, for the rest of my life.
Verse 2
When our babies came, it woke a new kind of love
Something in our hearts, changed us forever more
The years have slowly passed, Our little girl and boy
Have both grown up so fast, and filled our hearts with joy.
Chorus 1
Then one day, on her birthday, my baby girl looked up at me
And she said daddy, there's one thing you can do for me
The greatest Gift you can give your little girl, is to love her mommy so,
So open up your heart to this, tremendous gift for me
Open up your heart to the Greatest Gift of love.
Chorus 2
So my son saw his mommy and said, there's something he needs her to do
Todays the day you can make all my dreams, all my dreams come true
The Greatest Gift you can give to your son, is to love his daddy so,
So open up your heart to this tremendous gift for me
Open up your heart to the Greatest Gift of Love
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