3am and I wake up suddenly with this thought in my head that I had to get up and lay down with an acoustic guitar and rough vocal before I could go back to sleep. The next day, I did some tweaking of the lyrics and moved forward with finding the girl to sing it. Talk about a simple song that just pops into your head....
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pJF-PxZYhBU
Any feedback would be greatly appreciated (melody, lyrics, production....???). Thanks!
Great to hear the organ in this! i really like the lyrics… i wonder though if those chorus lines should end right time rather than you… stretch out the time.. then the final line just adds the For me…? just a thought… really like it!
February 09, 2021
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THE RIGHT TIME FOR ME... (E. LAMB)
YOU’RE THE KIND OF GUY...
WALKED IN AND CAUGHT MY EYE...
I DIDN’T WANT YOU TO...
THE TRICKS YOU USED WERE COOL...
TAUGHT AT A DIFFERENT SCHOOL...
THEY WEREN’T WHAT I WAS USED TO...
LOOK OUT GIRL..
ALL MY FRIENDS KEEP TELLING ME...
BE SMART GIRL...
‘CAUSE HE’S MESSING WITH YOUR SANITY...
YOUR SANITY, BUT THEN YOU...
YOU CAME AROUND AT THE RIGHT TIME, YOU...
YOU CAME AROUND AT THE RIGHT TIME, YOU...
YOU CAME AROUND AROUND AT THE RIGHT TIME FOR ME...
I’M A GIRL THAT’S NOT THE KIND...
TO GIVE A BOY MY PRECIOUS TIME...
AND LOOK IN YOUR DIRECTION...
BUT WHEN I DID AND SAW YOU WHERE...
YOUR EYES AND SMILE, THERE’S SOMETHING THERE...
I KNEW THAT I’D GIVE YOU MY AFFECTION...
LOOK OUT GIRL...
ALL MY FRIENDS KEEP TELLING ME...
BE SMART GIRL...
‘CAUSE HE’S MESSING WITH YOUR SANITY...
YOUR SANITY, BUT THEN YOU...
YOU CAME AROUND AT THE RIGHT TIME, YOU...
YOU CAME AROUND AT THE RIGHT TIME, YOU...
YOU CAME AROUND AROUND AT THE RIGHT TIME FOR ME... AT THE RIGHT TIME FOR ME...
I’VE BEEN IN LOVE WITH GUYS LIKE YOU BEFORE...
THAT BROKE MY HEART...
LOVE DON’T LIVE THERE NO MORE...
YOU SHOWED ME JUST WHAT IT REALLY MEANS...
THAT TRUE LOVE IS MORE THAN...
JUST A DREAM...
(REPEAT BRIDGE & CHORUS)
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Cool lyric. Conversational, relatable, and catchy. Keep up the good work. -Fox
February 06, 2021
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Great to hear the organ in this! i really like the lyrics… i wonder though if those chorus lines should end right time rather than you… stretch out the time.. then the final line just adds the For me…? just a thought… really like it!
February 09, 2021
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Fox Beyer
Cool lyric. Conversational, relatable, and catchy. Keep up the good work. -Fox
February 06, 2021
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