This is a song recorded by my friend John Colbert. I am getting ready to shop it around to publishers and record companies. I would love to know what the songwriting community thinks.
Please provide feedback, the good bad or ugly. I thank you in advance.
Thank you Naomi. I actually agree with your feedback. My original chorus lyrics were more descriptive,(and better in my opinion) but rejected by my publisher. After the changes he thought it was much better and agreed to sign it. As of right now I am waiting for the contract. Thank you again for your imput. It means so much. Stay well.
November 29, 2020
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i appreciate your commenting on my comment. Interesting that the publisher wanted it “her” to be confined to just her jeans and t-shirt. Ha Ha
Let me know when you sign! Congratulations !!!
December 02, 2020
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NEVER MORE BEAUTIFUL
words and music by Allan Rosensweig
I remember waking up, thanking God I made it through the surgery
Felt a little pain, but then I felt an angel holding me
Your blue-eyed smile, your gentle touch told me everything’s alright
And I can't believe that first night you never left my side
In an old T-shirt with your hair pulled back
Tucked underneath that Wolverines cap
In a chair right next to me
Trying to get some sleep
And you didn’t have any make-up on
In faded blue jeans with the knees all torn
Such a sight for my sore eyes to see
You never looked more beautiful to me
Well you don’t even know it yet, but I took a picture of you sitting there
Now I keep it in my pocket and carry it with me everywhere
Just to remind me I’ll never find another love this strong
A once in a lifetime one in a million in my arms
In an old T-shirt with your hair pulled back
Tucked underneath that Wolverines cap
In a chair right next to me
trying to get some sleep
And you didn’t have any make-up on
In faded blue jeans with the knees all torn
Such a sight for my sore eyes to see
You never looked more beautiful to me
You were never more never more beautiful to me
Copyright 2020 by Allan M. Rosensweig
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Like the title “hook”-but I wonder if the t-shirt/torn jeans description is overused? I would love to know more about what draws you to conclude this woman was never more beautiful to you- something about her as well as her t-shirt & jeans?
November 29, 2020
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Thank you Naomi. I actually agree with your feedback. My original chorus lyrics were more descriptive,(and better in my opinion) but rejected by my publisher. After the changes he thought it was much better and agreed to sign it. As of right now I am waiting for the contract. Thank you again for your imput. It means so much. Stay well.
November 29, 2020
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i appreciate your commenting on my comment. Interesting that the publisher wanted it “her” to be confined to just her jeans and t-shirt. Ha Ha
Let me know when you sign! Congratulations !!!
December 02, 2020
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Naomi Elliott
Like the title “hook”-but I wonder if the t-shirt/torn jeans description is overused? I would love to know more about what draws you to conclude this woman was never more beautiful to you- something about her as well as her t-shirt & jeans?
November 29, 2020
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