Co-written with Mike Parker (Mike is the man!)
1. Does the demo sound high quality
2. Does every line point to the main point of the song
3. At any point do you lose interest in the song?
Thanks for checking my song out ( Long One)
Regarding this particular song I’d say Yes to all 3 points. Really enjoyed it and it’s the kinda modern vibe that I love.
Congrats on a great write!
November 05, 2020
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Sorry meant the answer no to the last point.
I didn’t lose interest at all through the song.
November 05, 2020
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The demo sounds great. But I feel the first 3 chorus lines have too many words, before getting to the 2 hook lines. With some shorter lines, I feel it would give the listener some time to reflect and anticipate the hook . Hope this help, just my opinion. Bob
January 11, 2021
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Verse
I remember all the weekends,
we wouldn’t sleep till the sun came up
All the clubs that we had to sneak in,
Playin’ cool like we weren't too young
I always thought that feeling,
was a high that would never end
I guess that I was dreamin’,
cause now I’m low as I’ve ever been
Chorus
I didn’t know that with you gone every friday night feels dead
That letting you go didn't mean getting you out of my head
Standing alone in a crowded room, trying to move but it’s just no use
girl when you left you took the party with you
Ya when you left you took the party with you
Verse
All of my friends keep sayin’,
I should drink you off my mind
But your favorite song keeps playing,
and it takes me back in time
To that sophomore spring break evening,
when I bought your fake ID
It wasn't hard believing,
cause it was all so real to me
Bridge
By now I know, that I could go; and chase those old times like a fool
The town’s the same, and nothing changed, I guess all that's gone is you
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Greyson, to answer your very specific requests for feedback. 1. Your production is very, very good. Makes me wish I had money to spend on demos, cause I would defenitly be contacting you. 2. The lyrics are well crafted. No problem understanding the message of the song. 3. I didn’t really lose interest in the song , but didn’t really relate with it too much, since I turned 67 last month and my Friday night parties are a dim memory. Think I’ll go eat a bowl of cereal, get some fiber in my diet. Good job though.
October 31, 2020
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Thanks for checking my song out ( Long One)
Regarding this particular song I’d say Yes to all 3 points. Really enjoyed it and it’s the kinda modern vibe that I love.
Congrats on a great write!
November 05, 2020
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Sorry meant the answer no to the last point.
I didn’t lose interest at all through the song.
November 05, 2020
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The demo sounds great. But I feel the first 3 chorus lines have too many words, before getting to the 2 hook lines. With some shorter lines, I feel it would give the listener some time to reflect and anticipate the hook . Hope this help, just my opinion. Bob
January 11, 2021
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Greyson, to answer your very specific requests for feedback. 1. Your production is very, very good. Makes me wish I had money to spend on demos, cause I would defenitly be contacting you. 2. The lyrics are well crafted. No problem understanding the message of the song. 3. I didn’t really lose interest in the song , but didn’t really relate with it too much, since I turned 67 last month and my Friday night parties are a dim memory. Think I’ll go eat a bowl of cereal, get some fiber in my diet. Good job though.
October 31, 2020
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