A fun song for the beer belly men of the world!
Written by Mike McCorison/ melody and sung by J Sins
Any and all feedback appreciated. Thank you
Hey Ronnie
Thanks for listening to Beer belly man. Joe and his wife are a country duo called The Sins Country. Yeah I am more of that 90’s style writer for the most part I think, but am trying to write more in todays market too. Thanks for your suggestions you had made and will take a look at some of them and see what I can come up with. Always good to hear from you. Take care and look forward to listening to some more of your songs.
February 13, 2020
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Mike McCorison,
This little edge of “Real World” lyrics is so Cool & refreshing! This is really a good tune! Everyone is so “on edge” with Structure, Lyrics, Form and Commercial value that I REALLY enjoy a song like this!
You got my vote brother! lol
February 21, 2020
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Hi Roger
Thanks for listening to Beer Belly Man. I appreciate your thoughts on this and glad you liked it. I have since changed up the song a bit on the lyrics to make it smoother hopefully. The melody does need work I think also so am looking for someone that may want to collaborate on it and rework it to make it a fun loving tune! I think it could be one of those fun songs people would enjoy. Thanks again
February 22, 2020
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Beer Belly Man
Well I get up every morning
It’s a brand new day
Grab a cup of Joe go to work for pay
Eight long hours til that whistle sounds
We’re gonna punch out
And knock a couple rounds down
Oh yeah oh oh yeah
Ice cold beer twelve ounces at a time
Bottle or tap either one is fine
We’ll grab some popcorn
Some peanuts in a shell
We’re gonna live it on up
Or we’re gonna go to hell oh yeah
Chorus:
Its all bought and paid for I don’t owe a dime
I’ve paid my dues a six pack at a time
Its been a pleasure popping every can
Bottoms up boy I’m a Beer Belly Man
Bottoms up boy I’m a Beer Belly Man
Bridge:
I’m a Beer Belly Man I got quite the roll
It jiggles like jell-o in a plastic bowl
I carry my weight like a pony keg
Pop my top baby let’s take a swig
Weekend warriors they haven’t got a clue
Its takes a brew a plenty to drink in my crew
Monday, Tuesday, Wednesday night
We practice for the weekend just to get it right oh oh
Just to get it right oh oh
Well Thursday comes, then Fridays here
This Beer Belly Mans gonna drink some beer whew ya
Ice cold beer twelve ounces at a time
Bottle or tap either one is fine
We’ll grab some popcorn
Some peanuts in a shell
We’re gonna live it on up
Or we’re gonna go to hell
Chorus:
Its all bought and paid for I don’t owe a dime
I’ve paid my dues a six pack at a time
Its been a pleasure popping every can
Bottoms up boy I’m a Beer Belly Man
Bottoms up boy I’m a Beer Belly Man
Got dunlop disease hanging over my belt
My baby don’t mind she still melts
She still loves me for who I am
She can’t get enough of this Beer Belly Man
She can’t get enough of this Beer Belly Man
Chorus:
Its all bought and paid for
I don’t owe a dime
I’ve paid my dues
A six pack at a time
Its been a pleasure popping every can
Bottoms up boy I’m a Beer Belly Man
Bottoms up boy I’m a Beer Belly Man
Bottoms up boy I’m a Beer Belly Man
Bottoms up boy I’m a Beer Belly Man
Written by Mike McCorison 2011
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Hey Mike, thanks for sharing your song!
Nice sounding demo too! Who is J Sins? His voice reminds me of a cross between Roger Miller and Tracy Lawrence. He sounds great!
In my ears your song has a 90s, novelty style, country vibe to it. I like writing stuff like that too.
You have some great lines and the backstory has some truth to it. The title of your song seems a bit degrading to me though. Granted people like their beer and that “body by Bud” lifestyle has changed over the years. I think a lot of buds got wiser on their health choices, especially country artists.
With that in mind, I don’t hear anything wrong with the melody or the demo recording. I do have a few lyrical suggestions for you to ponder over to maybe shine a better light on the song.
First, change the title from “Beer Belly Man” to something like Beer, Beer, Beer Man. Same syllable count but with a different message. That opens up a bigger crowd in the bro brew crew.
Bottoms up boys, I’m a beer, beer, beer man.
The bridge would have to be re-written from a different point of view to give the chorus a different perspective. Normally bridges are two to maybe three lines but I could be wrong.
I hope that helps. Thanks again for sharing your song. Happy ♫♪♪ Songwriting!
February 13, 2020
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Hey Ronnie
Thanks for listening to Beer belly man. Joe and his wife are a country duo called The Sins Country. Yeah I am more of that 90’s style writer for the most part I think, but am trying to write more in todays market too. Thanks for your suggestions you had made and will take a look at some of them and see what I can come up with. Always good to hear from you. Take care and look forward to listening to some more of your songs.
February 13, 2020
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Mike McCorison,
This little edge of “Real World” lyrics is so Cool & refreshing! This is really a good tune! Everyone is so “on edge” with Structure, Lyrics, Form and Commercial value that I REALLY enjoy a song like this!
You got my vote brother! lol
February 21, 2020
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Hi Roger
Thanks for listening to Beer Belly Man. I appreciate your thoughts on this and glad you liked it. I have since changed up the song a bit on the lyrics to make it smoother hopefully. The melody does need work I think also so am looking for someone that may want to collaborate on it and rework it to make it a fun loving tune! I think it could be one of those fun songs people would enjoy. Thanks again
February 22, 2020
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Ronnie Glenn
Hey Mike, thanks for sharing your song!
Nice sounding demo too! Who is J Sins? His voice reminds me of a cross between Roger Miller and Tracy Lawrence. He sounds great!
In my ears your song has a 90s, novelty style, country vibe to it. I like writing stuff like that too.
You have some great lines and the backstory has some truth to it. The title of your song seems a bit degrading to me though. Granted people like their beer and that “body by Bud” lifestyle has changed over the years. I think a lot of buds got wiser on their health choices, especially country artists.
With that in mind, I don’t hear anything wrong with the melody or the demo recording. I do have a few lyrical suggestions for you to ponder over to maybe shine a better light on the song.
First, change the title from “Beer Belly Man” to something like Beer, Beer, Beer Man. Same syllable count but with a different message. That opens up a bigger crowd in the bro brew crew.
Bottoms up boys, I’m a beer, beer, beer man.
The bridge would have to be re-written from a different point of view to give the chorus a different perspective. Normally bridges are two to maybe three lines but I could be wrong.
I hope that helps. Thanks again for sharing your song. Happy ♫♪♪ Songwriting!
February 13, 2020
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