Sometime your past can haunt you.
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The whole song is very pretty—gorgeous production and performance. From a song writ perspective, it took a long time to get to the first chorus. The build to the second chorus was attractive, and I like the energy of the instrumental interludes. The bridge is neat. Overall reminds me of Evanescence.
December 26, 2013
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Once upon a time there was love between us Once upon a time we were shining bright
But then the dark came
Took our love away
We never had a chance
I can’t believe what has happened here Thought you were the one now it’s you I fear And I can’t get away
From your memory
You’re always here with me
I can’t look now, you’re all around
Oh what if it’s too late?
CHORUS
I’m haunted by your ghost now Everywhere I go now
I can hear you call my name
I feel you when I’m all alone
See you when my eyes are closed How can I escape?
I still feel your arms around me Why can’t you just let me go?
I just want you gone
Please just say the torture’s done But you are here to stay
I can’t look now, you’re all around I know that it’s too late
CHORUS
I feel you breathing
I hear you speaking
It’s you I’m seeing
This can’t be happening (2x)
CHORUS*
I’m haunted by your ghost now Everywhere I go now
I can hear you call my name
I hear your voice inside my head Playing over things you said How can I escape?
I feel you breathing
I hear you speaking
It’s you I’m seeing
This can’t be happening (2x)
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Wow, well done! I like how much thought you put into musical aspects that a lot of singer-songwriters don’t pay attention to. The first thing I noticed was your drum beat… I like the creativity with the snare rolls and the syncopation on the intro/verse. The background vocals are also a great counter-melody. These are the things that recording/producing a full track forces you to think about, as opposed to just writing guitar chords to sing to. The name “Ghost” is appropriate, because the song feels haunting.
Now for some constructive criticism. 
I felt like it took a little too long to get to the chorus the first time, and then again the second time. Because the song is slow-tempo’d but driving and heavy, the song has almost worn out its welcome by the end of the second chorus by providing so much intensity but at a slow pace. There are a couple things that could help this. One would be speeding the tempo up a few clicks. Another would be shortening the verse/post-chorus by a few phrases. Then the one that I would suggest because I think it should be done regardless is creating more diversity/distinction between verse/prechorus/chorus/postchorus/bridge. This can easily be done just by making slight changes to the instrumentation. The drum rhythm in the first verse is great, maybe bring that back, perhaps in the postchorus. You could also remove heavily distorted guitars in the verse/prechorus to allow build and emphasis on the chorus. It’s little things like these that can make a huge difference in the progression of your song.
Once again, great job, those are just some suggestions, if you’re looking for ‘em. keep it up!!
November 20, 2013
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The whole song is very pretty—gorgeous production and performance. From a song writ perspective, it took a long time to get to the first chorus. The build to the second chorus was attractive, and I like the energy of the instrumental interludes. The bridge is neat. Overall reminds me of Evanescence.
December 26, 2013
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Wow, well done! I like how much thought you put into musical aspects that a lot of singer-songwriters don’t pay attention to. The first thing I noticed was your drum beat… I like the creativity with the snare rolls and the syncopation on the intro/verse. The background vocals are also a great counter-melody. These are the things that recording/producing a full track forces you to think about, as opposed to just writing guitar chords to sing to. The name “Ghost” is appropriate, because the song feels haunting.
Now for some constructive criticism.
I felt like it took a little too long to get to the chorus the first time, and then again the second time. Because the song is slow-tempo’d but driving and heavy, the song has almost worn out its welcome by the end of the second chorus by providing so much intensity but at a slow pace. There are a couple things that could help this. One would be speeding the tempo up a few clicks. Another would be shortening the verse/post-chorus by a few phrases. Then the one that I would suggest because I think it should be done regardless is creating more diversity/distinction between verse/prechorus/chorus/postchorus/bridge. This can easily be done just by making slight changes to the instrumentation. The drum rhythm in the first verse is great, maybe bring that back, perhaps in the postchorus. You could also remove heavily distorted guitars in the verse/prechorus to allow build and emphasis on the chorus. It’s little things like these that can make a huge difference in the progression of your song.
Once again, great job, those are just some suggestions, if you’re looking for ‘em. keep it up!!
November 20, 2013
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