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I had this idea a long time ago. A buddy (Chris Loid) and I sat down and wrote it. It's meant to be fun, patriotic, inclusive, and applicable to the upcoming (in a couple years) 20th anniversary of 911.
Opportunities to strengthen the lyric. I covers a lot of ground and I'm curious if it holds together for the listener.
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Frank and Amy's Army Surplus Store
man I loved that place
they sold tents and flags and fake hand grenades
beef jerky by the case
Slingshots, cots, and Zippos
MREs and bowie knives
Frank says he died in Vietnam
And Amy brought him back to life
They were ready for anything
bug bites and bee stings
Earthquakes and tsunamis
little green men with laser beams
If there was a fight they'd fight
Standin' up for the stars and stripes
Lovin' Laughin' Lettin' freedom ring
They were ready for anything
He’s was in and out of crazy
And she never was no saint
But they hit knees to pray for peace
On that September day
Their neighbors closed their shops up
Frank and Amy wouldn't leave
They painted red across the windows
Said U.S. flags 4 free
They were ready for anything
bug bites and bee stings
Earthquakes and tsunamis
little green men with laser beams
If there was a fight they'd fight
Standin' up for the stars and stripes
Lovin' Laughin' Lettin' freedom ring
They were ready for anything
When Amy died, Frank didnt cry
When we gathered at their place
But he raised a glass, to love that lasts
He died the next day
They were ready for anything
Heaven, hell, and in between
Zombie outbreak quarantines
Irradiated chimpanzees
If there was a fight they'd fight
Standin' up for the stars and stripes
Lovin' Laughin' Lettin' freedom ring
Now there ain't a fight to fight
Everything's for sale half price
Step inside, you'll find what you need
They were ready for anything
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I like the backstory and the American pride shown throughout the song. It falls more into the folk/country genre than straight up country in my opinion. I’m not sure how this would appeal to our countries 911 horrific event but it is a patriotic theme based song.
There’s a few lyrical tweaks you might consider. Like removing the “and” word between tents and flags. Too many conjunction words on that line. Also, the line about Frank dying the next day seems kind of sudden. Maybe “he died before his next birthday” or “but we all knew the struggles he faced” since the person telling the story is there during that toast. Other than that, I think you and your co-writer Chris did well.
My favorite lines:
Frank says he died in Vietnam
And Amy brought him back to life
If there was a fight they’d fight
Standin’ up for the stars and stripes
October 11, 2019
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Ronnie Glenn
I like the backstory and the American pride shown throughout the song. It falls more into the folk/country genre than straight up country in my opinion. I’m not sure how this would appeal to our countries 911 horrific event but it is a patriotic theme based song.
There’s a few lyrical tweaks you might consider. Like removing the “and” word between tents and flags. Too many conjunction words on that line. Also, the line about Frank dying the next day seems kind of sudden. Maybe “he died before his next birthday” or “but we all knew the struggles he faced” since the person telling the story is there during that toast. Other than that, I think you and your co-writer Chris did well.
My favorite lines:
Frank says he died in Vietnam
And Amy brought him back to life
If there was a fight they’d fight
Standin’ up for the stars and stripes
October 11, 2019
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